视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: give one direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., "capture" instead of "remember the moment by taking pictures").

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines so I can remember the colours and mood later.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for instance") and avoid filler or stuttering. Use precise vocabulary like "relaxed" and "surrounded by nature" but remove repetitive fragments.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel relaxed and calm. For instance, walking by a quiet lake or through a forest helps me unwind after a busy week.

建議: Give a clear balanced answer: say whether you prefer one or both, then support with two specific comparisons using linking words like "on the one hand" and "on the other hand". Avoid unclear words and incorrect vocabulary; use phrases such as "scenery", "landscapes", "cultural attractions".

範例: I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad. On the one hand, my country has beautiful natural scenery like mountains and lakes; on the other hand, visiting other countries allows me to see exciting architecture and different landscapes.

× Yes, I really like taking pictures of distinct views because I can't remember or remember the moment by taking pictures or the.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views because they help me remember the moment.

The original sentence has unclear structure, repetition ('remember or remember'), incorrect word choice ('distinct' -> 'different' is more natural here), and an incomplete ending ('or the.'). This is a sentence structure error (type 26). Suggestion: simplify the idea into a clear subject and clause: state the reason ('because') and what the pictures do ('help me remember the moment'). Avoid repeating words and finish the thought.

× Definitely, I prefer views and rural areas because I I can't, I just can't feel relaxed when I'm with, when I when I'm surrounded by nature.

✓ Definitely, I prefer rural views because I just can't feel relaxed when I'm surrounded by cities; I feel more relaxed in nature.

This sentence contains repetition ('I I', 'when I when I'), mixed and unclear phrasing ('prefer views and rural areas'), and a confused contrast between urban and rural. It is a sentence structure error (type 26). Suggestion: decide the intended contrast (urban vs rural), remove repeated fragments, and express both sides clearly (for example: prefer rural views; cannot relax in cities, relax in nature). Use consistent parallel structure for contrast.

× I can't say which is play through but but I like balls. In my country there are so many beautiful sceneries but at the same time in other countries I can see exciting.

✓ I can't say which I prefer, but I like both. In my country there are many beautiful landscapes, and at the same time I can see exciting sights in other countries.

This utterance has multiple problems: nonsense phrases ('play through', 'like balls'), repetition ('but but'), incorrect noun choice ('sceneries' -> 'landscapes' or 'scenic places'), and an incomplete final clause ('I can see exciting.'). These are sentence structure errors (type 26). Suggestion: replace garbled words with intended words ('prefer', 'both', 'landscapes', 'exciting sights'), remove duplication, and complete the comparative idea by stating what is exciting in other countries. Keep clauses concise and parallel.