视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use correct vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., 'selfie' repeated) and correct word choice (e.g., 'landscapes' instead of 'land cups'). Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Keep under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. Although I take a lot of selfies, I also like capturing landscapes and seaside scenes because they show natural light and atmosphere clearly.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer and organize supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I grew up', 'I prefer urban views') and give specific examples of what you photograph in the city (architecture, street scenes). Keep responses cohesive and within five sentences.

範例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in the city and feel comfortable there. For example, I enjoy photographing street markets and city skylines from buses or the skytrain, since the crowded scenes and architecture create interesting compositions.

建議: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and prepositions. Say clearly whether you prefer foreign or local views, then give reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Be specific about what interests you in other countries (new architecture, different cultures). Keep to three sentences and correct phrasing ('used to' vs 'familiar with').

範例: I prefer taking pictures in other countries because I am already familiar with most places in my own country. For instance, new cities have different architecture and street life, so I enjoy photographing unfamiliar scenes and cultural details.

× I am a selfie coin person actually so many friends call me selfie queen.

✓ I am a selfie-loving person, so many friends call me the selfie queen.

The phrase 'selfie coin person' is incorrect usage of adjectives/nouns. Use 'selfie-loving' (adjective) to describe a person who likes selfies, and include the definite article 'the' before a nickname 'selfie queen'. Improve clarity and correctness by using an adjective form and adding the article.

× I like to take selfie.

✓ I like to take selfies.

'Selfie' needs to be plural when speaking about the activity in general. This is an adjective/noun usage error; use the plural noun 'selfies' or say 'I like taking selfies.'

× Not only selfie, I really like to take pictures from different things, from different views, land cups, skills and beaches as well.

✓ Not only selfies; I really like to take pictures of many things, from different viewpoints: landscapes, skylines and beaches as well.

Multiple plural and word-choice errors: 'selfie' should be plural, 'from different things' is vague and ungrammatical—use 'of many things' or 'of different subjects'. 'Land cups' and 'skills' are incorrect words; likely 'landscapes' and 'skylines' were intended. Use plurals for general statements and correct nouns.

× Yeah, umm, honestly, as I grown up in the urban city, I really like to take pictures for urban city because I'm used to it.

✓ Yeah, umm, honestly, since I grew up in the city, I really like taking pictures of urban areas because I'm used to them.

Tense and phrasing errors: 'as I grown up' is incorrect; use past tense 'I grew up' or present perfect 'I have grown up'. 'Take pictures for urban city' is incorrect preposition and article use—use 'of urban areas' and plural 'them' to refer to areas. Also use 'taking pictures' for habitual action.

× I really like the crowd of the cities and really enjoy, uh, to take pictures.

✓ I really like the crowds in cities and enjoy taking pictures.

Use plural 'crowds' and correct preposition 'in cities'. Verb form: 'enjoy to take' is incorrect; 'enjoy taking' is correct (gerund after 'enjoy'). This fixes adjective/adverb and verb form errors.

× We from the sky train of the nature, from the buses and trains.

✓ I like taking pictures from the skytrain, as well as from buses and trains.

Original sentence is fragmented and lacks a proper subject and verb. Rephrase to a complete sentence and use correct nouns 'skytrain' and parallel structure 'from the skytrain, as well as from buses and trains.'

× Honestly, if uh, I really enjoying to take pictures of other countries because I'm really used to with my own country and whenever I really visited most of the places of my country but I'm really new in the other outside country so I really enjoy to take picture of other countries.

✓ Honestly, I really enjoy taking pictures of other countries because I'm very familiar with my own country; I have visited most places there, but I am new to other countries, so I enjoy taking pictures of them.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'I really enjoying' should be 'I really enjoy' (present simple) or 'I am really enjoying' (present continuous). 'Used to with' is incorrect; use 'familiar with'. 'Whenever I really visited' should be 'I have visited' or 'I have visited most places'. 'Other outside country' is redundant—use 'other countries' and plural 'them'. Use gerund 'taking pictures' after 'enjoy'.