视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Improve vocabulary (landscapes, wildlife) and correct slight grammar ("I always bring" instead of "I always take, I will always bring"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel abroad. I always bring a camera because I like capturing landscapes and wildlife; for example, I often photograph mountain ranges and local animals to remember each place. These photos help me recall the trip and share experiences with friends.

建議: Open with a direct topic sentence and avoid hesitations. Replace informal phrases like "a kid that grew up" with clearer language, and give a specific reason and a brief example using a linking word (because / so). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in a concrete urban environment. Therefore, peaceful countrysides and natural landscapes feel more refreshing to me, such as quiet fields and forest trails where I can relax.

建議: Avoid informal words like "literally" and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear preference, give a concise reason, and provide a brief specific example or contrast. Use linking words (because / therefore) and correct grammar ("I have traveled to most places in Taiwan"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because Taiwan is small and I have visited most places here. Therefore, scenery abroad often feels fresher and more varied, for example, I enjoy seeing alpine landscapes in Japan that are very different from Taiwan's scenery.

× Yes, I do like to take pictures of different views uh, especially when I'm traveling abroad, I always take, I will always bring a camera with me uh, I like to take the photos of different landscape, different umm mountain views, animals, everything that I can take I will.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when I'm traveling abroad. I always bring a camera with me. I like taking photos of different landscapes, mountain views, animals, and anything else I can photograph.

The sentence had several issues. Use of 'do like to take' is acceptable but 'do like taking' is more natural when describing a general habit (verb + -ing form). 'I always take, I will always bring' mixed tenses and wordiness; use simple present 'I always bring' for habitual actions. 'Different landscape' needs plural 'landscapes'. The final clause 'everything that I can take I will' is awkward; replace with 'anything else I can photograph'. Suggest using consistent simple present for habits, plural nouns where needed, and verb+ing for activities.

× Umm, I prefer views in rural areas because I'm a kid that grew up in, umm, a concrete jungle, so a rural uh view will be more attractive to me.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in a concrete jungle, so rural views are more attractive to me.

The student used 'I'm a kid that grew up in' which mixes present identity with past action; use past tense 'I grew up' to describe upbringing. 'A rural view' should match plural 'views' mentioned earlier, so 'rural views are' is correct for general preference. Also remove unnecessary fillers and use 'that' can be omitted. Suggest saying 'I grew up in a concrete jungle' and keep subject-pronoun consistency.

× I prefer views in other countries. Since Taiwan is a pretty small country I have traveled literally to everywhere it can possibly be. So I think umm, other countries we will be much more appealing to me, uh.

✓ I prefer views in other countries. Since Taiwan is a pretty small country, I have literally traveled almost everywhere in it. So I think other countries are much more appealing to me.

Several tense and phrasing errors: 'I have traveled literally to everywhere it can possibly be' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'I have traveled almost everywhere in it' to express experience; 'literally' is often misused and can be removed or replaced by 'almost'. The clause 'other countries we will be much more appealing to me' misorders pronoun and verb; use 'other countries are much more appealing to me' (present simple describes general preference). Suggest using correct preposition 'in' with 'everywhere in it' and proper subject-verb order.