视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Используйте естественные фразы и правильную грамматику. Сформулируйте главную мысль ясно (например: «Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views») и затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных причины с логической связкой. Избегайте ненаходящихся выражений («get a bath») и лишних повторов; уделите внимание согласованию существительных и глаголов (this kind of hobby is / hobbies help → this hobby helps).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me remember places and share them with friends. For example, when I visit a mountain or a seaside town, I take photos to keep the memories and encourage friends to visit those places too.

建議: Чётко выскажите предпочтение и обоснуйте его спланированно: одна тема — одна главная причина, затем добавьте одну конкретную деталь. Используйте связки (because, for example, moreover) и корректную грамматику (urban areas → urban areas are / I can recharge my batteries → I can recharge my batteries). Избегайте повторов и неясных фраз («I feel like» без завершения).

範例: Honestly, I prefer urban views because I find the city atmosphere energising and convenient. For example, city centres have cafes and galleries where I can recharge my batteries and enjoy modern architecture and parks.

建議: Начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите ясные и конкретные причины с логической связкой. Уточните формулировки (I like the nature in my country → I like the natural scenery in my country) и избегайте тавтологии и неправильного порядка слов («understand the beautiful» → appreciate how beautiful the world is).

範例: I like natural scenery in my own country, but I also want to see views in other countries because travelling helps me appreciate different landscapes and cultures. For instance, visiting coastal areas abroad would let me compare their beaches with those at home and learn about local traditions.

× Yes, I get a bath from taking pictures because this kind of hobbies are help me to to memorize and inspire my friends to visit this kind of place.

✓ Yes, I get a lot of enjoyment from taking pictures because these kinds of hobbies help me to remember things and inspire my friends to visit places like these.

The phrase 'get a bath' is incorrect idiomatically; use 'get a lot of enjoyment'. 'This kind of hobbies' mixes singular 'this' with plural 'hobbies' — use 'these kinds of hobbies' or 'this kind of hobby'. 'Are help me' is wrong form; use 'help me' (present tense plural subject). 'To to memorize' has duplicated 'to' and 'memorize' is better than 'memorise' depending on variant; use 'remember' for clarity. Suggestions: replace idiomatic errors with natural collocations, ensure demonstratives match number, remove duplicate words, and use correct verb form after plural subject.

× To tell the truth, I prefer urban areas because this kind of areas I could charge my batteries and also I like the the nature and also they are amazing I feel like.

✓ To tell the truth, I prefer urban areas because these kinds of areas let me recharge my batteries; I also like nature, which I find amazing.

'This kind of areas' mixes singular 'this' with plural 'areas' — use 'these kinds of areas' or 'this kind of area'. 'I could charge my batteries' is awkward in this context; idiomatically say 'let me recharge my batteries'. Repeated 'the the' is a typo. 'I like the nature' is unnatural; use 'I like nature' without the article. 'They are amazing I feel like' is a run-on and unclear; use a relative clause 'which I find amazing'. Suggestions: match demonstratives to noun number, use natural idioms, remove duplicate words, and combine clauses clearly.

× To be honest, I like the nature in my country but I want to see other countries views also because this kind of views help me to understand the beautiful, how beautiful our world.

✓ To be honest, I like the natural scenery in my country, but I want to see views in other countries as well because these kinds of views help me understand how beautiful our world is.

'I like the nature' is unidiomatic; use 'I like the natural scenery' or 'I like nature'. 'Other countries views' needs a possessive or reordering: 'views in other countries' or 'other countries' views' (possessive). 'This kind of views' mismatches singular 'this' with plural 'views' — use 'these kinds of views'. 'Help me to understand the beautiful, how beautiful our world' is awkward and ungrammatical; clarify to 'help me understand how beautiful our world is'. Suggestions: use correct demonstratives, prefer 'views in other countries', restructure sentence to remove redundancies and ensure the clause ends with a finite verb.