视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail or example. Use correct singular/plural and articles. Keep answers under 5 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. It’s one of my favorite hobbies because it helps me preserve special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the riverside because the light changes rapidly and each shot feels unique.

建議: Clarify your preference and avoid filler words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “urban” vs “rural”), fix unclear word choices (e.g., “hilarious” is wrong here), and support your opinion with a specific reason or example using a linking word like 'because' or 'however'.

範例: I prefer rural views because they offer natural scenery that I don't see in my daily urban life. For example, I enjoy photographing wide fields and old farmhouses because they look peaceful and photogenic, especially at sunrise.

建議: Make your sentence structure clearer and avoid redundancy. State your preference directly, give one or two specific reasons, and name examples correctly. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often show different cultures and historic architecture. For example, I would like to photograph the traditional shrines in Japan or the old streets of England because they feel unique and full of history.

× Taking picture is one of my favorite hobbies to do.

✓ Taking pictures is one of my favorite hobbies to do.

The noun 'picture' should be plural because 'one of my favorite hobbies' implies one hobby among many activities that involve 'pictures'. Use the plural form 'pictures' to match meaning and count. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to repeated activities or items (e.g., 'taking pictures', 'collecting stamps').

× I like to take pictures of moments that I like to capture.

✓ I like to take pictures of moments I want to capture.

The original repeats 'like' and uses an unnecessary infinitive overlap. Using 'want to capture' or simply 'I like to capture' is more natural and avoids repetition. Suggestion: Avoid repeating verbs with the same meaning; choose one ('like to capture' or 'want to capture').

× Uh, since I live in town area or urban area, hence I prefer, I mostly prefer views of or photography of uh, hilarious since that's something that I don't see in my usual life.

✓ Since I live in an urban area, I mostly prefer photographs of rural views because those are things I don't see in my usual life.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'town area' and awkward phrasing. Use 'an urban area' (article required) and 'photographs of rural views' is clearer than 'views of or photography of hilarious'. 'Hilarious' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'rural' or 'rural views' and 'because' is the correct conjunction rather than 'hence' in this spoken context. Suggestion: Use correct articles ('a/an/the') and clear nouns; avoid filler words and choose appropriate adjectives ('rural', 'countryside', 'scenic').

× I think they are quite aesthetic and appealing.

✓ I think they are quite aesthetically appealing.

'Aesthetic' is primarily an adjective; to modify 'appealing' (an adjective), use the adverb 'aesthetically'. The phrase 'aesthetically appealing' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Use adverbs to modify adjectives (e.g., 'visually appealing', 'aesthetically pleasing').

× Moreover, they are quite memorable to capture.

✓ Moreover, they are quite memorable to capture.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but slightly awkward: 'memorable to capture' is understandable. For clarity, use 'they are memorable' or 'they are worth capturing'. Suggestion: Prefer 'worth capturing' for natural spoken English: 'Moreover, they are worth capturing.'

× I prefer views of different countries because they are more enchanting, memorable and historical and in nation to culture being culturally different than my own country.

✓ I prefer views from other countries because they are more enchanting, memorable, and historically significant, and their cultures are different from my own.

Problems: 'views of different countries' is acceptable but 'views from other countries' is more natural. 'Historical' should be 'historically significant' to modify 'views'. Phrase 'in nation to culture being culturally different' is ungrammatical; replace with 'their cultures are different from my own'. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure and use clear prepositions ('from' other countries) and correct adjective forms ('historically significant').

× I believe countries like Japan, Korea and England have one of the most beautiful and historically significant.

✓ I believe countries like Japan, Korea, and England are among the most beautiful and historically significant places.

The original lacks a noun after 'historically significant' and misuses 'have one of the most'. Use 'are among the most ... places' to complete the comparison and provide a noun. Suggestion: Ensure comparative phrases include the thing being compared (e.g., 'the most beautiful places', 'the most historically significant countries').