视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับปรุงความถูกต้องของคำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ รวมทั้งทำประโยคให้ชัดเจนและสั้นลง ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อให้รายละเอียดเสริม เช่น “because” หรือ “for example” และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำซ้อน ตัวอย่างจุดที่ควรแก้: ใช้ “scenes” หรือ “views” แทน “wheels”, ใช้ “calming” แทน “calmly”, ใช้รูปแบบกริยาที่ถูกต้องเช่น “I enjoy experimenting with composition.”

範例: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they are calming. For example, I often photograph mountains, the sea and family gatherings. I also enjoy experimenting with composition to make the photos more interesting.

建議: คำตอบดี มีโครงสร้างชัดเจน แต่ควรแก้คำศัพท์และรูปประโยคที่ผิดเล็กน้อย และเพิ่มคำเชื่อมในประโยคย่อยเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น ใช้ “illuminated buildings” แทน “illuminating building” และเปลี่ยน “live stories” เป็นคำอธิบายที่ชัดเจนกว่า เช่น “lively streets”.

範例: I prefer urban areas because skyscrapers and bright city lights create an impressive skyline. For example, Bangkok looks especially beautiful at night with illuminated buildings and lively streets that make the scene vibrant.

建議: ปรับแก้คำที่เขียนผิดและลำดับประโยคให้กระชับ ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผลกับตัวอย่าง เช่น “for example” หรือ “also” คำที่ต้องแก้: “inching my” ไม่มีความหมาย ให้ใช้ “in the north” หรือระบุชื่อภูมิภาคแทน และควรเปลี่ยนเป็น “peaceful mountain views”.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the places well and it is easier to travel there. For example, in Phuket you can enjoy beautiful sunsets over the coastline, and in the north there are peaceful mountain views that I really like.

× I find landscapes very calmly and I enjoy experimental with like an composition.

✓ I find landscapes very calming and I enjoy experimenting with composition.

The adverb 'calmly' is incorrect because it modifies verbs; the intended meaning describes the effect of landscapes, so the adjective 'calming' (or present participle used as adjective) is correct. 'Enjoy experimental with like an composition' has multiple errors: 'experimental' is an adjective but a verb form 'experimenting' is needed after 'enjoy'; 'with like an composition' has incorrect words and article/order — use 'with composition' or 'with a composition'. Suggestion: use 'calming' and replace the phrase with 'enjoy experimenting with composition' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.'},{

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different wheels like mountains and the sea and sometimes parties of my family.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views like mountains and the sea and sometimes family parties.

The word 'wheels' is incorrect in this context; the intended noun is 'views'. 'Parties of my family' is awkward; the natural phrase is 'family parties'. Also maintain plural 'views' to match 'different'. Suggestion: replace 'wheels' with 'views' and reorder 'family parties' for natural phrasing.'},{

× For example, Bangkok looks especially beautiful at night with illuminating building and live stories.

✓ For example, Bangkok looks especially beautiful at night with illuminating buildings and lively streets.

'Illuminating building' should be plural 'buildings' to match the plural idea and 'illuminating' can be used but 'illuminated' or 'illuminating' both work; more natural is 'illuminating buildings' or 'illuminated buildings'. 'Live stories' is incorrect; likely intended 'lively streets' or 'city life'. Suggestion: use 'illuminating buildings and lively streets' to convey bright buildings and active streets.'},{

× For example, in Phuket you can enjoy beautiful sunsets over the coastline and inching my there are peaceful mountain views that I really like.

✓ For example, in Phuket you can enjoy beautiful sunsets over the coastline and in Chiang Mai there are peaceful mountain views that I really like.

'Inching my' appears to be a misspelling of 'Chiang Mai', a place name. This is a lexical error rather than a grammar rule, but it affects meaning. Also fix preposition and article usage: 'over the coastline' is correct. Suggestion: correct place name spelling to 'Chiang Mai' and keep 'there are peaceful mountain views'.' }]}