视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Travaillez la clarté et la concision. Évitez les hésitations (uh, you know) et les répétitions, structurez la réponse avec une phrase d'ouverture claire puis des détails précis. Utilisez des mots exacts (par exemple «scenic views» plutôt que expressions confuses comme «syndicate views»), et limitez-vous à 3–4 phrases pour rester dans la limite recommandée. Enfin, donnez un ou deux détails spécifiques (quand, où, quel angle) liés à l'expérience photographique.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially scenic spots. For example, every summer I take photos of West Lake from the mountains and along the shore to capture both wide panoramas and close reflections. I prefer early morning light because it creates soft colors and fewer tourists, which makes the photos more peaceful.

建議: Clarifiez la préférence avec une phrase-thèse directe, puis ajoutez des raisons précises et un contraste ordonné à l'aide d'un lien (e.g. "however" ou "although"). Évitez les répétitions («urban» plusieurs fois) et les hésitations. Donnez un exemple concret de ce que vous aimez en ville et ce qui vous attire à la campagne pour rendre la réponse plus convaincante.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and modern architecture of cities. For example, tall buildings, busy streets and vibrant cafes create interesting photo subjects and lively scenes. However, I also appreciate rural areas for their tranquility and natural landscapes, which offer peaceful and scenic compositions.

建議: Répondez directement puis comparez clairement en utilisant des marques de liaison (e.g. "on the one hand... on the other hand..."). Évitez les formulations imprécises («another feeling», «extra») et corrigez les temps et accords (par exemple "I lived" au lieu de "I was currently living"). Donnez un exemple précis pour chaque pays afin d'illustrer la préférence.

範例: I like views in both my country and abroad. On the one hand, living in France allowed me to admire landmarks like the Eiffel Tower and charming streets that feel very historic. On the other hand, views in my country give me a deep sense of familiarity and comfort, such as West Lake with its seasonal scenery that I enjoy photographing.

× Yeah, personally, I like taking pictures of different views, like the scenic views, you know, in my country, uh, the syndicate views like the Westlake in every summer I would like to take the Westlake from different aspect from the mountains, from the lake gastro.

✓ Yeah, personally, I like taking pictures of different views, like scenic views in my country, for example West Lake. Every summer I like to photograph West Lake from different angles, from the mountains and from the lakeside.

The original sentence used awkward forms such as 'the syndicate views', 'the Westlake', 'from different aspect', and 'lake gastro'. These are not correct English phrases. Change 'the Westlake' to 'West Lake' (proper noun without 'the' in this context) and use 'photograph' or 'take pictures' + 'from different angles' to express different viewpoints. 'Lakeside' is the correct noun for the edge of a lake. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and 'to' + base verb for habitual actions ('I like to photograph' or 'I like photographing').

× Well, I prefer the view from urban areas because I really like the the urban city, the urban environment.

✓ Well, I prefer views in urban areas because I really like the urban environment.

Redundant words 'the the urban city, the urban environment' and incorrect article usage make the phrase wordy. Use plural 'views' to match 'urban areas' and one concise noun phrase 'the urban environment'. Remove unnecessary repetition. Use plural/singular consistently.

× I like the modern lifestyles and but personally I would like to say that the rural areas sometimes would be attractive.

✓ I like modern lifestyles, but personally I would say that rural areas can also be attractive.

The original sentence incorrectly combined 'and but' and had awkward modal use 'would sometimes would be attractive'. Remove the extra conjunction and use 'but' alone. Use 'can also be attractive' or 'are sometimes attractive' for natural modal meaning. Keep parallel structure: 'I like X, but Y.'

× You know, they give me a sense of satisfaction.

✓ They give me a sense of satisfaction.

The sentence is acceptable but in context 'You know' is unnecessary and informal; removal improves clarity. Pronoun 'they' correctly refers to 'rural areas'. Keep pronouns clear and ensure antecedent is obvious.

× Well, I would like to say both of them are very attractive.

✓ Well, I would say that both are very attractive.

'Would like to say' is wordy and slightly awkward for giving an opinion. Use 'I would say that' to express opinion. Also 'both of them are' can be shortened to 'both are'. Maintain present simple for general opinions.

× You know, in another country like France, where I was currently living in for a long time, I think there I can see the Eiffel Tower extra.

✓ In another country like France, where I lived for a long time, I could see the Eiffel Tower, for example.

Problems: 'was currently living in' mixes past and present; use past 'lived' for a completed period. Avoid ending clause with 'in' when 'where' already indicates location. 'I think there I can see' is awkward—use 'I could see' or 'I was able to see'. 'Extra' is incorrect here; use 'for example' or 'for instance'. Use consistent tense and clear linking words.

× But in my country they can give me a sense of satisfaction and another feeling.

✓ But in my country they give me a sense of satisfaction and a different feeling.

Use present simple 'give' for general truths. 'Another feeling' is vague; 'a different feeling' is clearer. Ensure articles are used correctly: 'a different feeling'.