视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fix grammar; use one clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and complete sentences. Pay attention to verb forms and articles (e.g., 'a different perspective' or 'different lenses').

範例: Yes, I love taking photos of natural views when I travel because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph mountains and sunsets, and then I send the best shots to my family or post them on social media so they can see a different perspective.

建議: Complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Start with a clear preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'also'). Include one short example to make it concrete.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the dramatic skyline and the city lights at night. Also, I like the energetic atmosphere during the day, for instance, watching busy streets and street performers in the downtown area.

建議: Remove hesitations and redundant phrasing. Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add 1–2 specific reasons with linking words and a brief example. Use correct article usage and concise vocabulary.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because many places have modern architecture and distinct cultural scenes. For example, when I visited Tokyo I was fascinated by the combination of sleek skyscrapers and traditional temples, which felt very different from home.

× I enjoy capturing images of nature whenever I travel I love to make memories and I send these pictures to my family or post them on social media so that they can see life through different lens. I enjoy taking pictures and.

✓ I enjoy capturing images of nature whenever I travel. I love to make memories, and I send these pictures to my family or post them on social media so that they can see life through different lenses. I enjoy taking pictures.

This entry contains run-on sentences and punctuation errors that create sentence structure problems and also a singular/plural error ('lens' should be 'lenses'). Split the run-on into shorter sentences by adding a period after 'travel' and include a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and'. Change 'lens' to 'lenses' to match plural 'pictures'. Remove the incomplete ending 'and' to make the final sentence complete. Suggestions: use periods to separate independent clauses or connect them with appropriate conjunctions and punctuation; ensure nouns agree in number with context.

× I would say I prefer views from the urban areas. I like the beautiful skyline and lights at night in the city. I also like to see the energetic environments during the day in the city with their.

✓ I would say I prefer views in urban areas. I like the beautiful skyline and the lights at night in the city. I also like to see the energetic atmosphere during the day in the city with its bustle.

Problems: unnecessary article 'the' before 'urban areas' and an incomplete final clause 'with their.' Use 'in urban areas' (no 'the') for general preference. Add 'the' before 'lights' for specificity. Replace 'energetic environments' with 'energetic atmosphere' for natural phrasing and complete the clause by using 'with its bustle' or another noun to follow 'with'. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary definite articles for general categories; ensure every prepositional phrase has a clear object.

× Actually like the views from other countries because most times because the places developed, they are modern structures and I love to see the different cultures and surroundings in that place.

✓ Actually, I like the views from other countries because, most of the time, the places are more developed and have modern structures, and I love to see the different cultures and surroundings there.

Errors: missing subject 'I' at the start; redundant 'because because'; awkward clause order and pronoun use 'in that place' at end. Add the subject 'I'. Remove duplicate 'because' and use 'most of the time' for clarity. Change 'the places developed, they are modern structures' to 'the places are more developed and have modern structures' for correct grammar and clarity. Replace 'in that place' with 'there' to avoid repetition. Suggestions: ensure each sentence has an explicit subject, avoid duplicate conjunctions, and use concise pronouns.

× I like to see new things and experience new environments. So that's all.

✓ I like to see new things and experience new environments. That's all.

Minor issue: starting a short concluding sentence with 'So' is conversational but unnecessary; removing 'So' makes the response more natural in this formal test context. Suggestion: avoid filler words at the beginning of short concluding sentences.