视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "come capture", "take part photo", "relaxing works"). Also watch verb forms and word choice ("I take photos to remember relaxing walks", "I enjoy photographing interesting architecture").

範例: Yes — I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit a new city I often photograph interesting architecture because I like the details and the way buildings shape the skyline. I also take pictures in parks to capture peaceful scenes and remember relaxing walks.

建議: Give a clearer topic sentence and add one specific reason with a linking word. Replace vague words like "fancy" and "different vibe" with more precise vocabulary (e.g. "distinct character", "architectural variety"). Keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

範例: I prefer urban areas because of their architectural variety. For instance, cityscapes offer a mix of old and modern buildings, which gives each neighborhood a distinct character and many interesting photo opportunities.

建議: Fix grammar and be specific. Begin with a clear statement, then give a concrete example and explain what surprised you. Correct phrases like "different culture" -> "different cultures", "unique architectures" -> "unique architecture", and "contract with" -> "contrast with". Keep sentences natural and concise.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and unique architecture. For example, when I visited Italy I was amazed by the historical churches and palaces and how they contrast with modern urban areas, which made photographing the city especially fascinating.

× I enjoy taking pictures when I visit different places because I like to come capture interesting architecture.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures when I visit different places because I like to come to capture interesting architecture.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' before 'capture'. After 'like to' we use the full infinitive 'to capture', not the bare verb. Suggestion: use 'like to capture' or 'like capturing'. (Grammar problem type ID: 8)

× In the peaceful parks, for example, I often photograph striking buildings for their detail and city views, and I take part photo to remember relaxing works.

✓ In peaceful parks, for example, I often photograph striking buildings for their details and city views, and I take photos to remember relaxing walks.

Multiple issues: 'the peaceful parks' is unnatural here so use 'peaceful parks' (article choice tied to context), 'detail' should be plural 'details' when referring to features, 'take part photo' is ungrammatical — likely meant 'take photos' and 'relaxing works' is incorrect word choice; 'walks' fits the context. This is sentence structure and word choice; corrected to maintain grammatical nouns and plural forms. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the fancy buildings with the different vibe.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the fancy buildings with their different vibe.

Missing possessive pronoun 'their' before 'different vibe' to show the buildings have a vibe. Also 'the different vibe' without context is awkward; 'their different vibe' clarifies meaning. This is incorrect use of pronouns/articles and adjective-noun relation. (Grammar problem type ID:17)

× I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different culture and seeing unique architectures.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and seeing unique architecture.

'Different culture' should be plural 'different cultures' when referring generally to various national cultures. 'Architectures' is incorrect in this context; 'architecture' is an uncountable noun when referring to styles or examples collectively. Use 'unique architecture' or 'unique buildings'. This addresses article/quantifier and noun count issues. (Grammar problem type ID:14)

× For example, when I visit Italy, I was amazed by the historical buildings and how they contract with modern cities based.

✓ For example, when I visited Italy, I was amazed by the historical buildings and how they contrast with modern cities.

Tense inconsistency: use past tense 'visited' to match 'was amazed'. Also 'contract' is the wrong verb; the correct verb is 'contrast' meaning to show difference. The fragment 'based' is extraneous and ungrammatical and has been removed. Ensure past events use past tense verbs. (Grammar problem type ID:5)