视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition and make the sentence structure clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting reasons using a linking word. Avoid filler sounds and ensure sentences are concise (max 4–5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I enjoy photographing the sea and mountains because their colours and light make me feel relaxed. Also, sunlight often creates interesting contrasts that make photos more appealing.

建議: Make your answer a complete, connected response. Use linking words (for example, because, and, even when) to join ideas and avoid unfinished sentences and fillers like 'uh'. Give one clear reason and an example to support it.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and natural. For example, I like scenes with trees and birds, and even on cloudy days the light and atmosphere can feel calming.

建議: Be careful with repetition and factual accuracy. Combine sentences to form a clear structure: topic sentence, supporting details with examples. Avoid repeating words and check proper nouns spelling. Give one or two specific examples briefly.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because Colombia offers very diverse landscapes. For instance, we have beautiful coastlines and mountain ranges where people can go birdwatching or climbing, so there are many opportunities to enjoy nature.

× Yes I I love taking pictures especially in the views that I love the most like the sea view, the mountains or the sunlight because I think pictures could be relaxing and could give you happiness.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures, especially of views I love most, like the sea, the mountains, or sunlight, because I think pictures can be relaxing and can bring happiness.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'I I' (sentence structure error, type 26) and awkward preposition use 'in the views' (type 11). Also 'could give you happiness' is better expressed as 'can bring happiness' to match the present-tense general ability (modal verb usage, type 4). Suggestion: remove the duplicate word, use the preposition 'of' with 'pictures' ('taking pictures of views'), simplify 'the views that I love the most' to 'views I love most', and use 'can' for general ability. Use commas to separate items in a list and after introductory phrases.

× Also I love the scenery that has trees and birds and uh, the sunlight. Even if the day is Gray or it's cloudy. I think it's.

✓ Also, I love scenery that has trees, birds, and sunlight, even if the day is grey or cloudy; I think it is more relaxing.

The original contains a sentence fragment 'Even if the day is Gray or it's cloudy.' and an incomplete sentence 'I think it's.' (sentence structure errors, type 26). 'Gray' should be lowercase 'grey' (capitalization is not in the list but is stylistic). Combine ideas into one or two complete sentences. Replace the fragment with a full clause and complete 'I think it is' with the intended adjective 'more relaxing' to make the meaning clear.

× I prefer the views in my country because my country, Colombia, has a lot of different sceneries.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because my country, Colombia, has a lot of different scenery.

'Scenery' is usually an uncountable noun in English, so 'sceneries' is incorrect (article/quantifier error, type 22/14). Use 'a lot of different scenery' or 'many different landscapes'. Also 'the views in my country' is acceptable, but 'views in my country' is slightly more natural. Suggest using uncountable form or a plural alternative like 'landscapes'.

× For example, we have the sea scenery and also the mountains. Columbia has three mountains that are good for doing birding and doing climbing.

✓ For example, we have the sea and the mountains. Colombia has three mountain ranges that are good for birdwatching and climbing.

The country name was misspelled 'Columbia' instead of 'Colombia' (spelling error; treated as sentence structure error type 26). 'Sea scenery' is awkward — 'the sea' is better. 'Three mountains' is likely intended as 'three mountain ranges' or 'three mountains' depending on meaning; 'mountain ranges' is more natural if referring to regions. 'Doing birding' and 'doing climbing' are awkward: use 'birdwatching' and 'climbing' (verb+ -ing form corrected, type 8). Suggest correct spelling for country name and use natural collocations.

× So you can enjoy those those sceneries.

✓ So you can enjoy those sceneries.

The sentence has a repeated word 'those those' (sentence structure error, type 26) and 'sceneries' is nonstandard (use 'scenery' or 'landscapes'). Remove the duplicate word and use 'scenery' or 'landscapes' to be natural.