视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar: begin with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details using linking words, and avoid repetition. Focus on accurate verb forms and clearer expressions (e.g., "sunsets always stun me" not "stunned").

範例: I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially sunsets, because they often have vivid colours and dramatic clouds. For example, last month I photographed a sunset over the river where the sky turned orange and purple, which made the scene feel peaceful and worth capturing.

建議: Start with a direct, grammatically correct statement, then give one clear reason with a specific example. Use linking words (for example, however, while) correctly and avoid awkward phrasing like "full a picturesque site."

範例: I prefer urban views because the contrast between buildings and the sky creates interesting compositions. For example, I like photographing the sunset behind a skyline because the silhouettes of tall buildings make the colours stand out more.

建議: Give a clear opening sentence and then one or two precise reasons with a clear linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "somewhere near" and "maybe"; instead name concrete examples and use correct sentence structure.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a variety of landscapes, from mountains to city towers. For instance, I can easily visit a nearby hill to watch a mountain sunset or go downtown to photograph the sun setting behind a historic tower.

× I really love to capture different views, especially when there are some beautiful sunsets as they always stunned.

✓ I really love to capture different views, especially beautiful sunsets, as they always stun me.

The original uses the past form 'stunned' incorrectly to describe a habitual reaction; the present simple 'stun' is needed for habitual actions. Also 'as they always stunned' lacks an object; add 'me' to indicate who is affected. Use of 'some' before 'beautiful sunsets' is unnecessary and awkward here. Improve by using present simple for habitual reactions and including the object 'me'. Suggested revision strategy: replace past tense verb with present simple 'stun' and add 'me' after the verb; remove 'some' for conciseness.

× I always got stunned by the view as it always makes me feel so I was always mesmerized by the view that I had to capture it.

✓ I am always stunned by the view; it always makes me feel amazed, and I have to capture it.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly ('got stunned', 'makes', 'was always mesmerized', 'had to capture'). For a general habit or ongoing reaction, use present simple or present perfect. Here 'am always stunned' or 'I am always stunned' and 'it always makes me feel amazed' are appropriate. 'Had to capture it' implies past necessity; use 'have to capture it' or 'I have to capture it' for a habitual urge. Also the original is run-on and unclear; separate into clearer clauses and use consistent present tense.

× That's why I really take a lot of pictures of sunsets.

✓ That's why I take a lot of pictures of sunsets.

The adverb 'really' is unnecessary and weakens formality; grammatically the sentence is fine but can be tightened. The verb tense 'take' in present simple correctly expresses habitual action. Suggest removing 'really' for clarity and conciseness.

× I prefer views in urban areas because it is quite unusual to see a full a picturesque site of sunset or a special view in urban areas, while it's more common in rural areas and I feel like the combination of both buildings and the sunset.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because it is quite unusual to see a full, picturesque sunset or a special view in cities, while such sights are more common in rural areas, and I like the combination of buildings and the sunset.

The original has awkward singular/plural and article usage: 'a full a picturesque site of sunset' is ungrammatical (extra 'a', wrong noun 'site'). 'Urban areas' and later 'in urban areas' repetitive; 'cities' is clearer. Also 'it's more common in rural areas' lacks a clear subject; change to 'such sights are more common'. Improve by correcting articles, nouns, and agreement between subject and verb.

× I prefer views in my own country because there are rural sites of the view and there are also urban views, which is a really good mix of both.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because there are rural scenes and urban views, which make a really good mix.

The phrase 'rural sites of the view' is awkward; 'rural scenes' or 'rural views' is correct. Also the relative clause 'which is a really good mix of both' disagrees in number with the plural noun phrase; use 'which make a really good mix' or 'which is a great combination'. Use present simple 'prefer' is correct for habitual preference.

× And whenever I want, whenever there are sunsets, I can always go to somewhere near.

✓ And whenever I want, when there are sunsets, I can always go somewhere nearby.

'Go to somewhere near' is incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'go somewhere nearby' or 'go to a nearby place'. Also 'whenever there are sunsets' is odd; 'when there is a sunset' or 'when the sun is setting' is more natural. Suggest replacing with 'when there are sunsets' -> 'when the sun is setting' if desired.

× Maybe there are views of a mountain or views of some tower.

✓ Maybe there are views of a mountain or of a tower.

Repeating 'views of' is redundant. Use singular consistency: 'a mountain' and 'a tower' or plural if multiple features. Also 'some tower' is informal and awkward; use 'a tower' or 'towers'. Keep parallel structure for clarity.