视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition and avoid filler words like “umm.” Use correct verb forms and possessives (e.g. “myself,” “pictures of places”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me keep memories. For example, when I go on picnics I photograph the landscape and candid shots of my friends. Also, I often take several photos to capture different angles so I can choose the best ones later.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific, coherent reasons. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct article and number forms (“urban areas,” not “an urban areas”). Avoid vague sentences like “I do not have this type of idea.”

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer more variety, such as architecture, parks and busy streets. For example, I enjoy photographing modern buildings and street scenes, which I can’t find in the countryside.

建議: First, answer the specific question (own country or other countries). Then give concise, specific reasons and avoid repeating words. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, also).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it’s easier to access facilities and I’m familiar with the places. For example, I can quickly find cinemas, restaurants and reliable public transport, which makes sightseeing more convenient and relaxing.

× Yes I take picture I often to take pics of my and myself and places especially I visit to pic picnics I especially I visit to picnics.

✓ Yes, I take pictures. I often take pictures of myself and of places, especially when I visit picnics.

The student used singular 'picture' where plural 'pictures' is needed and omitted some prepositions and articles. Use plural for repeated actions ('take pictures'). Include 'of' with 'pictures of myself' and 'when' to indicate time. Remove redundant words and ensure correct word order. ID:1

× I really umm take pics and keep those memories.

✓ I really take pictures and keep those memories.

The phrase 'umm' is filler and not a grammar issue but ensure verb form is simple present 'take' to describe habitual action. Use full word 'pictures' for formality. No present participle needed here. ID:10

× I really take many pic.

✓ I really take many pictures.

Use the plural noun 'pictures' after 'many' because 'many' requires a countable plural noun. ID:1

× I I prefer an urban areas.

✓ I prefer urban areas.

Don't mix the article 'an' with plural 'areas'. Use either 'an urban area' (singular) or 'urban areas' (plural). The context favors the plural 'urban areas'. ID:1

× There are a lot of things in each and I do not have this type of idea.

✓ There are a lot of things to see, and I enjoy them; I do not have trouble deciding.

Original sentence is unclear and awkward. Replace 'in each' with 'to see' or specify 'in each area'. Clarify the second clause to express meaning; I interpreted as 'I do not have trouble deciding'. Improve cohesion and clarity. ID:26

× I prefer urban areas because there are many facility for me.

✓ I prefer urban areas because there are many facilities for me.

The countable noun 'facility' should be plural 'facilities' when used with 'many'. Also ensure agreement with 'are'. ID:14

× I can go easy and facilitate an entertainment.

✓ I can go easily and enjoy entertainment.

Use the adverb 'easily' to modify the verb 'go'. 'Facilitate an entertainment' is unnatural; use 'enjoy entertainment' or 'access entertainment'. Adjust verb and noun choice for natural English. ID:20

× I can go easily to cinema and restaurant and find transport and transport and good public transport which make life easy.

✓ I can easily go to the cinema and restaurants and find transport and good public transportation, which makes life easy.

Use definite article 'the' with 'cinema' in general contexts in British English. Make nouns plural where appropriate ('restaurants'). Remove duplicate 'transport'. Use 'public transportation' or 'public transport' consistently. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which makes' (singular 'transportation' or the whole idea) or 'which make' if plural subject; here treated as singular concept so 'makes'. Place adverb 'easily' before the verb for natural flow. ID:17