视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Use correct grammar (plural 'pictures') and remove fillers.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes, because they change with the seasons and light. For example, I often photograph the nearby river at sunset to capture the reflections and warm colors.

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and add one linking phrase and a specific detail. Replace informal "'cause" with "because" and correct subject-verb agreement.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are more peaceful and full of natural scenery. For instance, the rolling hills and quiet trails help me relax and take better photos.

建議: Organize your reply into a clear statement and one specific reason; avoid hesitations and vague phrasing. Use linking words like "however" or "also" and give a concrete example comparing local and foreign views.

範例: Some places in my country are beautiful, but I also enjoy views in other countries because they offer diverse landscapes. For example, I love seeing the alpine meadows in Switzerland, which are very different from the coastal scenery at home.

× I do like taking picture of views, especially natural views.

✓ I do like taking pictures of views, especially natural views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it refers to multiple photographs in general. Use plural nouns after verbs like 'take' when speaking about the activity in general. Suggestion: use 'pictures' when referring to more than one, or 'a picture' if referring to a single image.

× I like the I like the natural.

✓ I like natural scenery.

The original repeats 'I like the' and uses 'the natural' incorrectly as a noun phrase. 'Natural' is an adjective and needs a noun such as 'scenery' or 'views'. Also remove the repetition. Suggestion: combine into a clear phrase like 'I like natural scenery' or 'I like natural views'.

× Of course, I prefer rural areas 'cause it's beautiful and natural and make me feel comfortable.

✓ Of course, I prefer rural areas because they're beautiful, natural, and make me feel comfortable.

Multiple issues: 'cause' is informal and should be 'because' in this context; 'it's' (it is) is singular while 'rural areas' is plural, so subject-verb agreement requires 'they're'; 'make' correctly matches plural subject after change. Also add commas to separate adjectives. Suggestion: use 'because' and match plurality: 'rural areas... they're... make.'

× As a few in my country is beautiful, but uh, I like, uh, uh, I like, uh, the view of uh, the world, umm, especially that, uh, that uh, uh, being a natural and uh, green.

✓ Some places in my country are beautiful, but I like views of the world, especially those that are natural and green.

Several grammar problems: 'As a few' is incorrect; use 'Some places' to indicate plural locations. 'Is beautiful' mismatches plural subject; use 'are beautiful'. 'The view of the world' is awkward; 'views of the world' fits better. 'That being a natural and green' is ungrammatical—use 'those that are natural and green.' Suggestion: simplify and remove fillers, ensure plural nouns and verbs agree, and use clear relative clause 'those that are...'."}]}