视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Improve word choice (e.g., “mountain views,” “street scenes,” “portraits”) and reduce grammatical errors (e.g., use ‘I enjoy’ once).

範例: I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountain views at sunrise and colorful street scenes in my city, because the light and atmosphere make each photo unique. I also like taking portraits of my family and friends to capture personal memories.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid tense inconsistencies and repetition (e.g., ‘area area’). Use precise vocabulary like ‘greenery’, ‘peaceful’, ‘escape’.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they help me relax and unwind. For instance, the greenery and open fields remind me of calm walks outside the city, so looking at rural photos helps me feel less stressed after busy days.

建議: State your preference clearly, then explain with specific reasons and one short example. Remove fillers (‘uh’) and correct grammar (‘it reminds me of my memories’ → ‘it reminds me of home’). Be concise and logical.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of home and personal memories. For example, seeing familiar landscapes and local festivals in photos makes me feel connected and peaceful, unlike unfamiliar scenes from abroad.

× I like, enjoy. I enjoy taking pictures of different views such as sunset and sunrise with Mountain View and also Street View and also my family pictures.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views such as sunsets and sunrises, mountain views, street scenes, and pictures of my family.

The student used redundant fragments ('I like, enjoy') and inconsistent noun forms. Use the gerund 'enjoy taking' correctly (Grammar ID 8). Also pluralize countable nouns like 'sunset' and 'sunrise' when speaking generally, and use parallel structure for a list. Suggestion: remove redundancy and list items in parallel form.

× Yes, it's creativity, creative.

✓ Yes, it's creative.

The student used both the noun 'creativity' and the adjective 'creative' together incorrectly. Use the adjective 'creative' to describe 'it' (Grammar ID 13). Suggestion: choose the correct word class (adjective) when describing something.

× I like rural areas views because it helps me to relax and remember the greenery view because I live in urban area area so it helps me to calm down and take a breath when I was looking at the picture of rural areas.

✓ I like views of rural areas because they help me relax and remember the greenery; since I live in an urban area, they help me calm down and take a deep breath when I look at pictures of rural areas.

Multiple preposition and article issues: use 'views of rural areas' rather than 'rural areas views' (Grammar ID 11). Also use 'in an urban area' with the article 'an' (Grammar ID 22). Pronoun and verb agreement: 'they help me' for plural 'views' (Grammar ID 27). Tense consistency: use present simple 'when I look' instead of past 'when I was looking' because this is a general preference (Grammar ID 6). Suggestion: correct prepositions, include articles, ensure subject-verb agreement, and keep tense consistent.

× I like to take pictures of my loved friends.

✓ I like to take pictures of my close friends.

The phrase 'loved friends' is not a natural collocation in English; 'close friends' or 'friends I love' is better (Grammar ID 12). Suggestion: use appropriate adjective-noun combinations; 'loved' is usually used in 'loved ones.'

× I prefer, uh, views in my own country because it's, uh, remind, remind of me, uh, my memories because, uh, I have the best life with the, with my country and, uh, it makes me calm and make me think.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my memories; I had the best experiences in my country, and they make me feel calm and thoughtful.

Multiple pronoun and verb form errors: 'it's remind' is incorrect; use 'they remind me' because 'views' is plural (Grammar ID 12 and 27). Also use past tense 'had' for past experiences if referring to events already lived (Grammar ID 5), and ensure verb agreement 'they make me' not 'it makes me' when referring to plural 'views' (Grammar ID 27). Suggestion: remove filler words, use plural pronouns to match nouns, choose appropriate tense for past experiences, and keep verbs agreeing with subjects.

× I like rural areas views because it helps me to relax and remember the greenery view because I live in urban area area so it helps me to calm down and take a breath when I was looking at the picture of rural areas.

✓ I like views of rural areas because they help me relax and remember the greenery; since I live in an urban area, looking at pictures of rural areas helps me calm down and take a deep breath.

The original sentence is long, repetitive, and has incorrect clause connections (Grammar ID 26). Restructure by splitting into clearer clauses, remove repetition ('because' twice), correct articles, and keep tense consistent. Suggestion: break long sentences into shorter, linked clauses and avoid repeating the same idea.

× I like rural areas views because it helps me to relax and remember the greenery view...

✓ I like views of rural areas because they help me relax and remember the greenery.

Using 'it helps' is incorrect when referring to 'views' (plural). Use 'they help' for subject-verb agreement (Grammar ID 2 and 27). Suggestion: ensure the verb form matches the subject number.

× I enjoy taking pictures of different views such as sunset and sunrise with Mountain View and also Street View and also my family pictures.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views such as sunsets and sunrises, mountain views, street scenes, and pictures of my family.

'Taking' is correct as a gerund here, but some noun phrases need correction: use plural forms and natural collocations like 'mountain views' and 'street scenes' (Grammar ID 10). Suggestion: maintain consistent noun forms and parallel structure in lists.

× I like rural areas views because it helps me to relax and remember the greenery view because I live in urban area area...

✓ I like views of rural areas because they help me relax and remember the greenery; since I live in an urban area, ...

Missing article before 'urban area' and repetition 'area area' are errors. Use 'an urban area' (Grammar ID 22). Suggestion: include appropriate articles for singular countable nouns.

× ...it makes me calm and make me think.

✓ ...they make me feel calm and make me think.

Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' should be 'they make' to match plural 'views', and 'make me think' is acceptable but pair with correct subject (Grammar ID 5 and 27). Suggestion: ensure subjects and verb forms agree and choose tense that matches the intended meaning.