视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and redundancy; begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'capture', 'souvenirs', 'landscapes'). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I often visit gardens and historical sites to capture landscapes and architectural details, which I keep as visual souvenirs. This helps me remember special moments and learn more about those places.

建議: Start with a clear preference sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples; avoid vague phrases like 'I think' repeated. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'man-made structures' instead of 'artificial places'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they offer natural landscapes and authentic scenes of local life. For example, I like photographing farmers, rustic houses, and wide fields, which tell me more about the community and its traditions.

建議: Clarify and correct vocabulary (replace 'wheels' with 'views'). Give a direct answer, then explain briefly with a comparison and an example. Use linking words (however, because, for instance) and avoid filler words. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Although I appreciate the views in my own country because I'm familiar with the culture and historic sites, I would prefer to see views in other countries to discover new landscapes and traditions. For instance, visiting a coastal town abroad would let me photograph different architecture and local customs.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures, especially, uh, with different views.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures, especially of different views.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; 'enjoy' is followed by the gerund 'taking' which is correct, but the object should be 'of different views' not 'with different views'. Use 'of' to indicate the subject of the pictures. Suggestion: say 'taking pictures of different views.'

× I enjoy going to gardens or historical places and explore the area and uh, take some different pictures to store that memories and uh, enjoy it when I wanna remember that time.

✓ I enjoy going to gardens or historical places and exploring the area, taking different pictures to preserve those memories, and enjoying it when I want to remember that time.

Parallel structure requires using the same verb forms: after 'enjoy' use gerunds: 'exploring', 'taking', 'enjoying'. 'Store that memories' has two errors: 'store' should be 'preserve' or 'save', and 'that memories' should be plural demonstrative 'those memories'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Suggestions: keep gerunds for parallel list, use 'those memories', and use formal 'want to.'

× I think I enjoy both but my preference would be rural areas because I think taking pictures from rural areas gives you the opportunity to see people and artificial places that human made and explore to know that area a little bit more.

✓ I think I enjoy both, but my preference would be rural areas, because taking pictures in rural areas gives you the opportunity to see people and man-made places and to learn more about the area.

Preposition 'from' is better as 'in' when describing where you take pictures. 'Artificial places that human made' is awkward: use 'man-made places'. 'Explore to know that area a little bit more' is unidiomatic; use 'to learn more about the area' or 'to explore and learn more about it'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'in rural areas', 'man-made', and 'to learn more about the area.'

× I think I really enjoy the wheels in my country, but I would prefer, uh, the wheels in other countries because I'm familiar with my own culture and, uh, own historical places.

✓ I think I really enjoy the views in my country, but I would prefer the views in other countries because I'm familiar with my own culture and historical places.

'Wheels' is a wrong word; context requires 'views'. 'Own historical places' is redundant after 'my' and missing a pronoun; simplify to 'my historical places' or just 'historical places'. Remove unnecessary commas. Suggestion: use correct noun 'views' and avoid redundant 'own.'

× However, I don't have much opinion about others, so I would prefer to explore, uh, their cultures and their views.

✓ However, I don't have strong opinions about other countries, so I would prefer to explore their cultures and views.

'I don't have much opinion about others' is unidiomatic; use 'I don't have strong opinions about other countries' or 'I don't have many opinions about others.' Also 'their cultures and their views' is repetitive with 'their' twice; remove the second 'their'. Suggestion: use 'strong opinions' and concise phrasing 'their cultures and views.'