视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, coherence and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and article use (e.g., "taking pictures", "I usually prefer to enjoy the moment myself"). Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I don't often take pictures of views. I usually prefer to enjoy the moment myself because taking photos can distract me from the experience. Also, I don’t own a good camera, so I rarely try to capture high-quality shots.

建議: Answer directly and organize supporting points logically. Use linking words (for example, moreover) and specific, complete sentences. Fix vocabulary and sentence structure (e.g., "I prefer views in urban areas"; explain why with clear examples like nightlife, architecture). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer a variety of sights. For example, I enjoy city lights at night and the interesting rooftops and modern architecture. Moreover, the busy streets and cultural venues make urban views more exciting for me.

建議: Clarify your main point and give specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., "I prefer views in my own country"). Explain why with concrete details (memories, cultural familiarity) and link ideas with words like "because" or "so". Keep answer to 2–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of my childhood and family. For instance, seeing familiar streets and local festivals makes me feel connected to my culture and more comfortable than when I travel abroad.

× To be honest, I don't really like taking picture.

✓ To be honest, I don't really like taking pictures.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when speaking about the general activity of taking photos. Use the plural for countable nouns when referring to them in a general or non-specific sense. Suggestion: use 'pictures' or rephrase as 'taking a picture' if referring to one photo.

× I usually refer enjoy the moment by myself, then stop and taking the picture.

✓ I usually prefer to enjoy the moment by myself, then stop and take pictures.

Several issues: 'refer enjoy' is incorrect collocation; likely intended 'prefer to enjoy'. After 'prefer' use 'to' + base verb or '...prefer enjoying' but here 'prefer to enjoy' fits. After 'stop' use base verb or gerund depending meaning; 'stop and take pictures' is correct sequence. Also changed 'the picture' to 'pictures' for general activity.

× Moreover, I don't have a professional camera so.

✓ Moreover, I don't have a professional camera, so I don't take many photos.

This sentence is incomplete and ends with 'so' without a result clause. Add a main clause to complete the thought. Also provide a logical consequence related to lacking a professional camera. Suggestion: finish the sentence with the consequence, e.g., 'so I usually use my phone.'

× I refer views in urban areas, for example the city, the city crops are at night are the interesting.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas; for example, the city at night is interesting because of the cityscape.

'Refer' is the wrong verb; use 'prefer'. The original has incorrect noun phrases and word order: 'the city crops are at night are the interesting' is ungrammatical. Clarify as 'the city at night is interesting' or 'cityscapes at night are interesting.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper word order.

× Architecture The rooftop also give.

✓ The architecture and rooftops are also appealing.

This fragment lacks proper structure and verb agreement. Combine elements into a full sentence: use plural 'rooftops' with plural verb 'are' and an adjective 'appealing' or a verb 'attract me.' Ensure articles and conjunctions are included.

× I reform views in my own countries for a reason.

✓ I prefer views in my own country for one reason.

'Reform' is incorrect here; likely 'prefer'. Use singular 'country' when referring to one's own nation in general. 'For a reason' is vague; 'for one reason' or 'for several reasons' is better. Maintain present tense 'prefer'.

× The law it make me feel more connected.

✓ The local culture makes me feel more connected.

Using 'The law it make' is incorrect: duplicate subject 'it' and wrong verb form. Likely 'local views or culture make me feel more connected.' Use correct subject-verb agreement: 'culture makes' (singular subject 'culture' with 'makes'). If keeping 'law', write 'the laws make me feel...' depending on intended meaning.

× The local views make me remind me for the childhood memory and.

✓ Local scenes remind me of my childhood memories.

This sentence is ungrammatical and repetitive: 'make me remind me' is wrong. Use 'remind me of' to indicate something causes recollection. 'Childhood memory' should be plural 'childhood memories' or 'a childhood memory' depending on context. Remove trailing 'and' and complete the thought. Suggestion: 'Local scenes remind me of my childhood.'