视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases, fix grammar (e.g., remove stray words like "the trouble" and "St."), and add one specific example with a linking word. Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I like photographing different views because they preserve memories and capture a place’s atmosphere. For example, when I visit the coast, I take wide landscape shots to remember the light and colors. This helps me vividly recall the emotions I felt at that moment.

建議: Make the response into a clearer two-part contrast with correct grammar and linking words. Use one linking phrase (e.g., "on the other hand") and provide a specific detail or example for each to make it more concrete.

範例: I prefer both urban and rural views because they offer different benefits. Urban areas are vibrant and full of activities, for example I enjoy photographing busy markets, while rural areas are quieter and more peaceful, which helps me relax when I take landscape photos.

建議: This answer is clear and well-structured but can be improved by using a stronger topic sentence and one linking word (e.g., "however"), and by adding a brief personal example to make it more specific and natural-sounding.

範例: I enjoy views both at home and abroad because each offers something different. At home, I love calm scenes like quiet villages and historic temples that feel restorative; however, views in other countries offer fresh experiences, such as modern skylines in Tokyo that challenged my idea of urban design.

× For example, when the trouble I photograph landscapes and St. scenes so that later I can look back and vividly recall the experiences and emotions I felt.

✓ For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and street scenes so that later I can look back and vividly recall the experiences and emotions I felt.

The original sentence contains an incorrect word 'trouble' where the intended word is likely 'travel' or another activity; this is a lexical error rather than a past participle issue. However, it also has a word 'St.' which seems to be an abbreviation for 'street' and is inappropriate in this context. Correcting these words makes the sentence grammatical and clear. Suggestion: replace incorrect or abbreviated words with the intended full words ('travel', 'street scenes') and ensure the clause order is clear ('when I travel, I photograph...').

× I actually prefer both urban and rural areas because each has its own advantages, urban areas and vibrant and full of activities and amenities, while rural areas are quieter and more peaceful which helps me relax.

✓ I actually prefer both urban and rural areas because each has its own advantages: urban areas are vibrant and full of activities and amenities, while rural areas are quieter and more peaceful, which helps me relax.

The original sentence has a structure problem: a comma splice and a missing verb in the phrase 'urban areas and vibrant'. The list of clauses is not properly connected. Fix by using a colon or semicolon to introduce the explanation and ensure each clause has a verb ('urban areas are vibrant'). Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which helps me relax.'

× In my own country I like traditional peaceful landscapes, for example quiet villages and historic temples that feel very calming, while views in other countries give me fresh experiences and new perspectives, such as modern cityscapes or different natural scenery that I've never seen before.

✓ In my own country, I like traditional, peaceful landscapes, for example quiet villages and historic temples that feel very calming, while views in other countries give me fresh experiences and new perspectives, such as modern cityscapes or different natural scenery I have never seen before.

The original sentence is mostly correct but contains minor punctuation and contraction issues: add a comma after the introductory phrase 'In my own country' and a comma between coordinate adjectives 'traditional, peaceful'. Replace the contraction 'I've' with 'I have' to match the formal spoken style if desired; this also avoids mixing tenses awkwardly. No major preposition errors were present, but punctuation improves readability. Suggestion: maintain consistent formality and punctuate introductory elements and adjective pairs.