视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also correct minor grammatical issues (e.g., 'my attention span is short', 'I prefer to enjoy them with my own eyes').

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. However, my attention span is quite short, so I usually take quick, candid shots rather than spending a lot of time composing images. For example, when I visit a scenic spot I often take one or two clicks and then spend the rest of the time looking around and appreciating the scene.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then support it with specific details and a linking phrase. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'my grandparents live in a rural area', 'I prefer rural areas to urban ones'). Avoid fillers like 'you know' and finish sentences completely.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas to those in cities. For example, my grandparents live in the countryside and I visit them on holidays; there are cultivated fields and large mountains which feel peaceful compared with the crowded city. Therefore I tend to enjoy rural landscapes more.

建議: Provide a clearer stance and reduce vague phrases. Begin with a direct statement about preference, then give specific reasons and one example. Remove casual fillers ('you know', 'like') and improve phrasing ('I haven't traveled abroad').

範例: I don't strongly prefer one over the other, because every country has its own attractions. However, I do feel most attached to my own country, especially the beaches near my city, which I find beautiful and relaxing. Also, since I haven't traveled abroad yet, I naturally prefer the familiar coastal views at home.

× I live in an urban area but my grandparents is a rural area which I often visit for my holidays and I love the view there like they have little you know cultivated lands and big mountains not like in the city.

✓ I live in an urban area but my grandparents live in a rural area which I often visit for my holidays, and I love the views there; they have small cultivated fields and big mountains, unlike the city.

The original sentence uses the singular verb 'is' with the plural noun 'grandparents' (subject-verb agreement), and contains unclear pronoun references and informal filler words. Use 'grandparents live' to match plural subject (Grammar problem type ID 27: Subject-verb agreement). Replace 'they have little you know cultivated lands' with 'they have small cultivated fields' for clarity and formality. Use 'unlike the city' instead of 'not like in the city' for correct prepositional usage (Grammar problem type ID 11). Remove fillers and add punctuation to separate clauses (Grammar problem type ID 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestions: ensure verbs agree with their subjects, avoid fillers, and break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× I generally like taking photographs, but my attention span is very little, so if I want to take a photograph it should be completed within a little amount of time.

✓ I generally like taking photographs, but my attention span is very short, so if I want to take a photograph it should be completed in a short amount of time.

The phrase 'attention span is very little' is unidiomatic; use 'very short' for attention span. 'A little amount of time' is awkward; use 'a short amount of time' or 'a short time' (Grammar problem type ID 1: Singular and plural issue and Grammar problem type ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: use idiomatic collocations such as 'short attention span' and 'short amount of time' and keep consistent plurality and adjective usage.

× Like it'd just be a click and I love different views.

✓ It would just be a quick click, and I love different views.

Beginning with 'Like' is informal and unnecessary. 'It'd just be a click' is colloquial; 'a quick click' is clearer. Add a conjunction and comma to connect ideas properly (Grammar problem type ID 16). Suggestion: avoid sentence starters like 'Like' in formal speech and use clearer nouns and adjectives.

× Rather than clicking photographs, I would like to enjoy them with my own eyes.

✓ Rather than taking photographs, I prefer to enjoy the views with my own eyes.

'Clicking photographs' is informal; use 'taking photographs'. 'Enjoy them' is ambiguous—replace 'them' with 'the views' for clarity (Grammar problem type ID 12). Also replace 'would like to' with 'prefer to' for naturalness. Suggestion: use precise nouns instead of pronouns when meaning might be unclear.

× So I love I prefer rural areas than.

✓ So I prefer rural areas.

The original fragment 'So I love I prefer rural areas than' is ungrammatical: it mixes two verbs and uses 'than' without a comparison object. Delete the redundant clause and use 'prefer rural areas' (Grammar problem type ID 26: Sentence structure errors and ID 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestion: avoid combining two expressions of preference and ensure 'prefer ... to ...' is used when making comparisons.

× I do not discriminate like that, like each country has its own, you know, perspective and own views and own greatness and everything.

✓ I do not discriminate like that; each country has its own perspective, views, and qualities.

Remove filler 'you know' and awkward repetition 'own ... own'. Use 'qualities' instead of 'greatness' for natural collocation. Replace comma splice with semicolon or period for independent clauses (Grammar problem type ID 11 and ID 26). Suggestion: avoid fillers and repetitive words, and use proper punctuation to join independent clauses.

× It has beautiful beaches and I think I prefer beaches because I've never stepped foot outside my country until now.

✓ It has beautiful beaches, and I think I prefer beaches because I have never set foot outside my country until now.

'Stepped foot' is a nonstandard variant; the idiomatic expression is 'set foot'. Also expand contraction for clarity in formal contexts and include comma before conjunction joining independent clauses (Grammar problem type ID 10). Suggestion: use standard idioms such as 'set foot' and ensure punctuation connects clauses correctly.