视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise, avoid repetition and unnatural adverbs (e.g., "extremely" used twice). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photography because it lets me capture moments and preserve memories. For example, I often take photos at family gatherings and trips, so I can look back on them or share them with my children later.

建議: The answer is unclear and contains contradictions (saying fond of urban areas then praising nature). Clarify your preference in the topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Avoid long, awkward clauses and repeated adverbs.

範例: I prefer urban views because I like the variety of architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, city skylines, historic buildings and busy markets offer interesting shapes and colours that I enjoy photographing.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetitive phrases like "extremely beautiful" repeated three times. Begin with a direct preference, then give specific examples and brief descriptions. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences clear.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because Jordan has unique landmarks. For example, Petra’s rock-cut facades and Wadi Rum’s desert landscapes have distinctive shapes and textures that make them fascinating places to photograph.

× Yes, I extremely enjoy photography because it helps me capture the moment and create memories that I can look at in the future and show my kids.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy photography because it helps me capture moments and create memories I can look at in the future and show my kids.

Error type: adverb placement and word choice. 'Extremely enjoy' is unnatural; 'really enjoy' or 'enjoy very much' is correct. 'The moment' is too specific here; plural 'moments' fits general meaning. Also remove unnecessary 'that' for concision. Suggestion: use 'really enjoy' and 'moments' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:20 & 13

× I have always been fond of urban areas simply because I find nature so beautiful and extremely intriguing because of the different ways everything is structured.

✓ I have always been fond of urban areas, but I also find nature beautiful and intriguing because of the different ways everything is structured.

Error type: sentence structure and word choice. The original links fondness for urban areas with admiration of nature but uses 'simply because' then praises nature, creating a logical mismatch. Rewriting clarifies contrast and adds 'also' to present both ideas. Replace 'extremely intriguing' with 'intriguing' for natural tone. Suggestion: make the relationship between ideas explicit (e.g., 'but I also...'). Grammar problem type ID:26 & 13

× My home country Jordan has extremely beautiful landmarks that satisfy my likings such as the Petra and Wadi Rum with extremely beautiful which are extremely beautiful monuments and have a very unique structure and detail.

✓ My home country, Jordan, has beautiful landmarks that I like, such as Petra and Wadi Rum; they are unique monuments with interesting structures and details.

Error type: article usage and sentence structure. Remove the article 'the' before proper names 'Petra' and 'Wadi Rum'. 'Satisfy my likings' is awkward; use 'that I like'. The original repeats 'extremely beautiful' and has a fragmented clause 'with extremely beautiful which are extremely beautiful monuments'. Combine and simplify to avoid redundancy. Also add commas around 'Jordan' as an appositive. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use natural verbs ('like'), and remove incorrect articles before place names. Grammar problem type ID:22 & 26