视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: state your opinion in one topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and unclear phrases. Use descriptive vocabulary (boring → uninteresting, improve me → help my personal development) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don't enjoy taking photos of views. I find landscape photography uninteresting because I prefer activities like writing and reading that help my personal development, so I usually spend my free time improving my skills instead.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming your preference, then give two specific reasons connected with linking words. Replace vague or incorrect phrases (big skyspares, moving old) with accurate vocabulary (skyscrapers, bustling traffic, lively streets). Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid hesitation sounds.

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy of cities and the sight of tall skyscrapers. For example, I like watching bustling traffic and busy streets since they make the city feel lively and exciting.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Correct wording (account → country, CD → country/area) and provide concrete details about what you like (mountains, parks, cultural landmarks). Keep it concise and avoid trailing off; use 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes near my hometown are beautiful, with green hills and peaceful parks. Also, local cultural landmarks make the scenery more interesting and familiar to me.

× Don't like it because it is a boring thing to do and they umm, just uh, instead of this. I can't do the uh, writing or all the things that uh, will improve me, uh, the soul.

✓ I don't like it because it is boring and, instead, I focus on writing and other activities that will improve my soul.

The original has multiple issues: missing subject and auxiliary in 'Don't like it' (sentence fragment) and awkward phrase 'a boring thing to do' (wordiness). 'They' is unclear and not needed. 'I can't do the writing' conflicts with intended meaning; context suggests preference for doing writing, not inability. This is a sentence structure and subject-verb problem. Suggest use a complete subject and verb ('I don't like'), simplify adjective phrase to 'boring', and clarify intent: 'I focus on writing and other activities that will improve my soul.' Keep tense simple present to match the habitual preference.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I like the cities and big skyspares and uh, umm, I like the moving old for traffic and moving off people and they're moving your life. It's very good.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I like the cities, the wide skies, the traffic, and the movement of people; it feels lively.

Original contains incorrect and unclear word choices: 'skyspares', 'moving old for traffic', 'moving off people' are not correct English. These are adjective/noun selection errors. Replace with appropriate nouns/adjectives: 'wide skies' instead of 'big skyspares', 'traffic' and 'movement of people' convey the intended idea. Use semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses. Maintain present tense for preference.

× I prefer views in my account because my CD have a very good views and a very good nature around my city and.

✓ I prefer views in my country because my city has very good views and beautiful natural surroundings.

The original uses incorrect pronouns/words: 'account' instead of 'country', and 'my CD have' is incorrect—likely meant 'city has'. There is also subject-verb disagreement ('CD have' should be 'city has') and article/number issues ('a very good views' wrong). Correct by replacing wrong terms, using singular subject 'city' with verb 'has', and using 'views' without 'a' or use 'very good views' and 'beautiful natural surroundings' for clarity.