视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is short and direct, which is fine as a brief response, but it is too minimal. To get a higher score, give a complete topic sentence and add one or two short supporting details (reason, example, or feeling). Keep the total to no more than 3–4 short sentences and use linking words if you add more than one detail.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me remember places I visit. For example, I often photograph city skylines and sunsets when I travel, and I later organize them in an album to show my family.

建議: Your answer attempts to give a preference and a reason but is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Make a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific, coherent reason. Use linking words (because, so, when) correctly and avoid unfinished clauses. Keep sentences concise and relevant.

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and variety of people and activities there. For instance, city parks and streets offer interesting scenes and I feel more comfortable and less anxious around crowds when I'm stressed about work.

建議: The answer is confusing and incomplete. Start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you prefer one or both, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague fragments and finish your thoughts. Use linking words (also, however, for example) to organize ideas and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I like views in both my own country and other countries because each offers something different. For example, my country has familiar landscapes and cultural scenes I appreciate, while visiting places like the United Arab Emirates lets me see modern architecture and new environments that inspire me.

× I'd like to view in urban areas because I like people around me and when I have no answers or nervous about anything in the work or job I would like.

✓ I'd like to live in urban areas because I like having people around me, and if I don't know the answers or feel nervous about anything at work I would prefer to be there.

Errors: 'view' is incorrect verb choice and likely intended 'live' (vocabulary, but treated here as verb form). The clause 'when I have no answers or nervous' lacks parallel structure and a proper auxiliary: it should be 'if I don't know the answers or feel nervous'. 'In the work or job' is awkward; 'at work' is the natural prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use 'live' for residence, use conditional 'if' for hypothetical situations, maintain parallel verb forms ('don't know' / 'feel nervous'), and use 'at work' for location.

× I'd like a two items. My country is very beautiful and other country which I see emirate country so far, but when I visit there and when?

✓ I would mention two things: my country is very beautiful, and I have also seen an emirate country so far, but I am not sure what comes to mind when I visit there.

Errors: 'I'd like a two items' is ungrammatical; use 'I would mention two things' or 'I have two preferences'. 'Other country which I see emirate country so far' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'I have also seen an emirate country so far'. The fragment 'but when I visit there and when?' is incomplete and lacks a main clause. Suggestions: rephrase to a complete sentence, use 'things' instead of 'items' in this context, use present perfect 'have seen' for experiences up to now, and avoid vague 'when?' by completing the thought (e.g., 'but I am not sure what I will do when I visit there').