视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce filler words (uh, so), and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a brief reason or example.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains for their dramatic shapes and city buildings for their interesting architecture, because both offer strong contrasts in light and texture.

建議: Improve grammar and vocabulary (architecture, lighting, crowds). Use a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid hesitation and finish the thought coherently.

範例: I prefer urban views because cities have striking architecture and historic sites that are easy to explore. Also, the night lighting and busy streets create lively scenes that are great for photography.

建議: Clarify your position (either choose a preference or say it depends and explain how). Correct vocabulary (architecture, monument name if unsure avoid unclear phrases like 'charming air'), and give specific examples. Keep answer concise and coherent with linking words.

範例: It depends, but I usually prefer views in my own country because my city has beautiful architecture and famous historic monuments. For example, I often visit the central square and the old cathedral, which both offer vibrant scenes and photo opportunities.

× I prefer urban areas because of the beautiful architect and historic places, which I can, uh, more observe in urban areas and also the lightning in the city with the more crowd, which, uh, and.

✓ I prefer urban areas because of the beautiful architecture and historic places, which I can observe more in cities, and also the lighting in the city with the larger crowds.

The speaker used 'architect' (a person) instead of 'architecture' (the style or structure), and 'lightning' (electrical discharge) instead of 'lighting' (illumination). 'More observe' is an incorrect adverb placement; place 'more' before the verb or use 'observe more' as corrected. 'The more crowd' is incorrect; use 'larger crowds' or 'more crowds'. Suggestions: learn common adjective vs noun pairs (architect vs architecture) and confuse 'lighting' vs 'lightning'; place adverbs correctly (observe more, more often) and use plural nouns with quantifiers (larger crowds).

× I prefer urban areas because of the beautiful architect and historic places, which I can, uh, more observe in urban areas and also the lightning in the city with the more crowd, which, uh, and.

✓ I prefer urban areas because of the beautiful architecture and historic places, which I can observe more in urban areas, and also the lighting in the city with the larger crowds.

The original used singular 'architect' and 'crowd' where plural or different forms were required: 'architect' should be 'architecture' (uncountable noun) and 'crowd' should be 'crowds' to match 'larger' or 'more'. Use correct noun forms and pluralization. Suggestion: check whether the intended meaning refers to people (crowds) or the profession (architect).

× I like taking pictures of different views, uh, like buildings, mountains, especially the things which I love the most, which I more gravitate towards.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, like buildings and mountains, especially the things I love most and gravitate toward.

'Which I more gravitate towards' is awkward: 'gravitate' should be followed by 'toward' (American) or 'towards' (British), and 'more' is unnecessary when using 'most'. Also remove redundant 'which' and simplify 'the things I love most'. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary words and use standard verb patterns: 'gravitate toward/against' and use 'most' for superlative.

× So it's a very vibrant city. So I enjoyed my city and also in.

✓ It's a very vibrant city, so I enjoy my city.

Tense and phrasing: the student mixed past 'enjoyed' with present description; because the question asks preference generally, use present simple 'enjoy'. The fragment 'and also in' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestions: maintain consistent tense for habitual statements and avoid sentence fragments.

× It depends, I also prefer views from my own country because the place I stay has more, has more beautiful architect and many historic places and a very popular monument like charming air.

✓ It depends. I also prefer views from my own country because the place where I live has more beautiful architecture, many historic places, and a very popular monument called Charming Air.

Original has repeated filler 'has more, has more', wrong noun 'architect' instead of 'architecture', missing relative pronoun 'where' for 'the place I stay', and awkward listing. 'Charming air' was unclear as a monument name; present it as a proper noun 'Charming Air' or clarify. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use correct relative clauses ('the place where I live'), and correct noun forms. Use parallel structure when listing items.

× English, of course. I like taking pictures of different views, uh, like buildings, mountains, especially the things which I love the most, which I more gravitate towards.

✓ Yes, of course. I like taking pictures of different views, like buildings and mountains, especially the things I love most and gravitate toward.

Starting with 'English, of course' is unnatural as an answer to 'Do you like taking pictures...?' Use 'Yes, of course.' Also 'which I love the most' is wordier than 'things I love most'. 'Which' is unnecessary. Suggestions: use appropriate pronouns and concise clauses; answer directly to the question with 'Yes' or 'No'.