视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid filler phrases and repetition. Focus on natural phrasing (e.g., "not really into photography" is fine) but correct tense and word choice and keep to at most 3–4 short sentences.

範例: I’m not really into photography. I prefer to enjoy moments rather than stop and take photos, so when I go shopping or eat out I usually just get on with it. Sometimes my friends take pictures, but I rarely join them because I find it interrupts the experience.

建議: Begin with a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence (e.g., "I prefer rural areas"). Give a specific reason and use linking words like "because" or "for example." Avoid incorrect vocabulary ("worst view") and replace with accurate descriptions ("better/beautiful views, more peaceful"). Keep sentences short and coherent.

範例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more scenic. For example, you can see wide open fields, mountains, and clear skies, which I find more relaxing than busy city streets.

建議: Answer the question directly and stay on topic: state your preference and give two specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "views" not "wheels") and natural expressions for wanting new experiences ("I want to experience something new"). Avoid fragmented sentences and personal details that aren't relevant. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures and landscapes. For example, traveling abroad lets me see new architecture, try different foods, and learn how people live in other places, which I find exciting.

× To be honest I'm not really into photography.

✓ To be honest, I'm not really into photography.

Missing comma after introductory phrase 'To be honest'. This is punctuation, but fits sentence structure corrections: add comma to improve clarity and correct conventional written form. Suggestion: place a comma after introductory phrases.

× I usually do whatever I want straight away, for example when I will have when I want to go to shopping or eating.

✓ I usually do whatever I want straight away, for example when I want to go shopping or eat.

Incorrect use of future 'will' and incorrect 'go to shopping' structure. Remove 'will have' (unnecessary) and use base verbs after 'go' or use gerund without 'to' for activities: 'go shopping' and 'eat'. Suggestion: after expressions like 'when I want to' use base verb or verb+noun correctly: 'go shopping' not 'go to shopping'.

× Normally my friends like to take a picture before but I'm not the one.

✓ Normally my friends like to take pictures beforehand, but I'm not one of them.

Singular 'a picture' and phrase 'before' are awkward; also 'I'm not the one' is unclear. Use plural 'pictures' for general habit and 'beforehand' for timing, and 'one of them' to indicate not sharing the habit. Suggestion: use plural for general habits and clear referent pronouns.

× If I have to pick one, I would you prefer rural areas because it's far away from the city and you can see the worst view from there.

✓ If I have to pick one, I would prefer rural areas because they're far from the city and you can see better views there.

Contains extra 'you' ('I would you prefer'), incorrect singular 'it's' referring to 'areas', and 'worst view' contradicts preference. Removed erroneous word, made subject-verb agreement plural ('they're'), and changed 'worst view' to 'better views' to match context. Suggestion: proofread for stray words, ensure pronoun agreement with plural nouns, and use adjectives that match intended meaning.

× I would prefer wheels from other countries.

✓ I would prefer views from other countries.

Wrong word 'wheels' likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'views'. Use correct noun to convey meaning. Suggestion: choose vocabulary that matches context; 'views' fits discussing scenery.

× I am 20 years old.

✓ I am 20 years old.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× I live in Thailand for 20 years.

✓ I have lived in Thailand for 20 years.

Use present perfect 'have lived' to describe an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I live in Thailand for 20 years' is ungrammatical in English. Suggestion: use present perfect with time expressions that indicate duration up to now.

× It's too boring.

✓ It's too boring here.

Add 'here' to clarify reference to the country; original sentence is understandable but adding location improves clarity. Suggestion: include context words when referring to a place.

× I want to fight off something new.

✓ I want to try something new.

'Fight off' means to repel or resist, which doesn't match intended meaning. Use 'try something new' to express desire to experience new things. Suggestion: choose verbs that match intended action.

× I want to survive.

✓ I want to experience new things.

'Survive' is incorrect in this context (means to remain alive); likely intended meaning is to have new experiences. Replaced with 'experience new things' to match context. Suggestion: ensure word choice reflects intended meaning.

× I want to see how it's look like.

✓ I want to see what it looks like.

Incorrect structure 'how it's look like' mixes 'how' and 'like' and wrong verb form 'look'. Use 'what it looks like' or 'how it looks' but not both. Suggestion: use 'what it looks like' to ask about appearance.

× Not even in the.

✓ Not even in the country.

Sentence fragment 'Not even in the.' is incomplete. Add the missing noun 'country' to complete the thought. Suggestion: ensure sentences contain necessary nouns and verbs to be complete.