视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答自然但存在填充词（umm）和冗长表达，应更直接、连贯并用连接词丰富细节。可以去掉多余的“umm”，用一到两句清晰陈述观点，然后加一两个具体例子或原因，以提高表达质量和流畅度。

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me appreciate the details of a place. For example, when I visit a park I take pictures of the trees and reflections in the lake to remember the atmosphere.

建議: 回答含有许多犹豫词和语法不够准确，应减少犹豫表达，直接给出立场并用一两个具体理由支持。注意语法（例如“is it's”错误），用连接词如“because”或“so”使逻辑更清晰。

範例: I prefer urban views because I live in the city and I feel a sense of belonging there. For instance, I like photographing street scenes and old buildings that remind me of daily life.

建議: 回答重复且词汇使用不准确（如“a magnificent”错误搭配），并有停顿词。应先给出明确偏好或说明难以选择，然后用具体对比和例子说明两者各自吸引你的地方，注意语法和词汇搭配。

範例: I find it hard to choose because both are appealing. I love the landscapes in my country for their history and familiar culture, but I also enjoy photographing foreign scenery to discover new architecture and natural sights.

× I would say it is a really good way for me to umm, just to appreciate umm, many views and it is a good way to use photo to record the scenes.

✓ I would say it is a really good way for me to, umm, just appreciate many views, and it is a good way to use photos to record the scenes.

句子中“to just to appreciate”出现了多余的“to”，而在“appreciate”后不需要再加不定式“to”。此外“photo”在此处应使用复数“photos”表示拍多张照片用于记录景色。建议删除多余的“to”，并把“photo”改为复数。

× Umm, well is it's a little difficult for me to make a choice, umm, but if I might say so, I prefer the urban views because nowadays I spend most of my time in city and the urban views can make me feel umm, just like a sense of belonging.

✓ Umm, well, it's a little difficult for me to make a choice, umm, but if I might say so, I prefer urban views because nowadays I spend most of my time in the city and urban views can make me feel, umm, a sense of belonging.

原句结构混乱：有多余的“is”导致句子不通；冠词使用不当“in city”应为“in the city”；“the urban views”可以改为“urban views”以避免重复。建议删除多余的“is”，在“city”前加定冠词“the”，并简化“the urban views”为“urban views”。（这些修正均属于句子结构和冠词使用问题。）

× It's really hard to select and for the sceneries in my country I would say I really love them and they are all very umm, fascinating and also a magnificent.

✓ It's really hard to choose. As for the sceneries in my country, I would say I really love them; they are all very, umm, fascinating and also magnificent.

原句中“select”用词不太自然，改为更常用的“choose”。“for the sceneries in my country”语序不自然，改为“As for the sceneries in my country”。另外“a magnificent”错误地把形容词“magnificent”当作名词使用或与不定冠词连用，正确应为形容词修饰名词，这里直接用“magnificent”作形容词。建议调整句子分句，引入“As for”，并删除错误冠词。

× But I also want to know more about the foreign sceneries in.

✓ But I also want to know more about foreign sceneries abroad.

原句结尾使用介词“in”但没有接地点，结构不完整。表达“国外的景色”可用“foreign sceneries abroad”或“sceneries in foreign countries”。建议补全介词短语为“abroad”或改为“in foreign countries”。