视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar and avoid redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Watch out for word choice (e.g. ‘a lot’ instead of ‘a mat’, ‘really obsessed’ rather than ‘really upset obsessed’). Keep answers to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I go out I often focus on finding interesting compositions or lighting, and I take photos of cityscapes or nature scenes. As a result, I usually end up with a variety of images that capture the mood of the place.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide two concise, specific reasons linked clearly. Avoid repetition and finish the thought. Use linking words like ‘because’, ‘for example’ and ‘also’. Correct small errors and omit duplicated words.

範例: I prefer urban views because they tend to be more modern and visually striking. For example, city architecture and colorful street scenes offer interesting shapes and contrasts, and also there are often well-maintained parks and public art that make photographs more appealing.

建議: Avoid negative or vague labels like ‘third world country’ and be more specific and diplomatic. Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two concrete comparisons (e.g. architecture, maintenance, diversity). Use linking words to make the answer coherent and keep it concise.

範例: I usually prefer views in other countries because they often have more diverse architecture and well-preserved sights. For example, in some countries I’ve seen historic districts and modern waterfronts that are well-maintained and offer a wide variety of photo opportunities, whereas my hometown has fewer such attractions.

× I like taking pictures as a mat.

✓ I like taking pictures as a hobby.

The original sentence uses 'mat', which is incorrect in this context. This is a vocabulary/word-choice error and yields a sentence-structure problem (map to 'Sentence structure errors' ID 26). Use 'hobby' to express an activity you enjoy. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns for intended meaning; when unsure, use common collocation 'taking pictures as a hobby'.

× Matter of fact I think I am really upset obsessed with taking pictures.

✓ As a matter of fact, I think I am really, almost obsessed with taking pictures.

This sentence has multiple issues: missing phrase 'As a matter of fact', wrong use of 'upset' before 'obsessed', and punctuation needed. These are sentence-structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect word usage. Use 'almost obsessed' or 'really obsessed' and include the introductory phrase 'As a matter of fact,' followed by a comma. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and avoid conflicting adjectives like 'upset obsessed'.

× Most of the times when I go out, I look forward to taking pictures and not just about going to the place or exploring the place but more about taking pictures in the nice view.

✓ Most of the time when I go out, I look forward to taking pictures; it's not just about visiting or exploring a place but more about photographing a nice view.

'Most of the times' is incorrect; correct form is 'most of the time' (singular time as an adverbial phrase) — maps to 'Singular and plural issue' ID 1. The sentence is also long and awkward (sentence structure error ID 26). Rephrase for clarity: 'visiting' or 'exploring' a place rather than 'going to the place', and 'photographing a nice view' is clearer than 'taking pictures in the nice view'. Suggestion: use set phrase 'most of the time' and divide long sentences with punctuation.

× I would say that I prefer views in urban areas because most of these views are aesthetically pleasing, unlike the rural areas where the most of the views are a bit old, most of their houses are a bit old in rural.

✓ I would say that I prefer views in urban areas because many of them are aesthetically pleasing, unlike in rural areas where many houses and views are a bit old.

Problems include unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'most of the views' and awkward repetition 'most of their houses are a bit old in rural.' These are article errors and sentence structure issues (ID 22 and ID 26). Use 'many of them' or 'in rural areas' without extra articles, and combine related ideas to avoid repetition. Suggestion: avoid overusing 'the' and rephrase to 'in rural areas' and use 'many' or 'some' for quantity.

× In urban areas, the views are more modern, the houses are newer, and the the aesthetic is.

✓ In urban areas, the views are more modern, the houses are newer, and the overall aesthetic is more contemporary.

The original sentence repeats 'the' and ends incomplete with 'the aesthetic is.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and an article repetition issue (ID 22). Complete the idea by specifying how the aesthetic is (e.g., 'more contemporary'). Suggestion: avoid duplicating words and ensure every clause is completed.

× I prefer views in other countries because my country is regarded as one of the third world country and it's a bit underdeveloped.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because my country is regarded as a third-world country and it is a bit underdeveloped.

Use of 'one of the third world country' is ungrammatical and article wrong—should be 'a third-world country' (ID 22 Article errors and ID 26 sentence structure). Also hyphenate 'third-world' when used as an adjective. Suggestion: use 'a third-world country' or better 'a developing country' to be more current and neutral.

× Unlike most other countries where it still boils down to the views in other countries that are aesthetically pleasing, my country is not as developed and polished as some other countries might be so.

✓ Unlike many other countries, where the views are often more aesthetically pleasing, my country is not as developed or polished as some of those countries.

This sentence is repetitive ('other countries' repeated) and awkwardly phrased ('it still boils down to the views in other countries'), which are sentence structure errors (ID 26). Remove redundancy and clarify comparison with 'many other countries' and 'some of those countries.' Suggestion: simplify sentence structure, avoid repeating the same phrase, and place comparative elements close together.