视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity and fluency: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and connect ideas with a linking word. Be more specific about what kinds of views you prefer and why. Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because a photo can capture the overall scene quickly. For example, when I photograph a building from several angles, I can show its architecture against different backdrops. Also, taking multiple shots helps me choose the best composition later.

建議: Give a direct preference first, then explain with specific reasons and a linking word. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., skyline, streetlights, sunsets) and avoid vague phrases. Keep it concise and structured: preference + reason + example.

範例: I don't have a strict preference; it depends on the subject. For urban photography I prefer night scenes because the skyline and streetlights create dramatic contrasts, whereas in rural areas I like capturing sunsets for their colors and peaceful atmosphere.

建議: Be concise and avoid hesitations and repetitions. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with a specific reason and one concrete example. Correct small vocabulary mistakes (e.g., “high places” instead of “hard places”) and avoid trailing sentences.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I can access high viewpoints like skyscrapers or towers. For instance, from a tall building at night the city lights sparkle below and look like stars, which I find especially beautiful.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views 'cause if I for example it could give me a few a few full overview of what I've been looking at.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because, for example, they can give me a fuller overview of what I have been looking at.

The sentence contains issues with verb forms and noun agreement. 'Cause' should be 'because' for formal speech. 'If I for example it could give me' is ungrammatical; use a clear subject and modal: 'for example, they can give me'. 'A few a few full overview' is redundant and incorrect; use 'a fuller overview' and ensure plural 'they' refers to 'pictures'. Maintain present perfect 'have been looking at' to match ongoing relevance.

× If I take a picture of a building and with a different view I could see the different background of it, so I like to take multiple.

✓ If I take pictures of a building from different viewpoints, I can see its different backgrounds, so I like to take several.

The original mixes clauses awkwardly and misuses singular/plural. Use plural 'pictures' and 'viewpoints' to match meaning. Replace 'could' with 'can' for general ability. 'The different background of it' is better as 'its different backgrounds'. 'Take multiple' is incomplete; use 'take several'.

× It depends on what I'm taking, what I'm focusing on.

✓ It depends on what I'm taking and what I'm focusing on.

The original is understandable but lacks parallel structure. Use 'and' to connect the two noun phrases for clarity and maintain present continuous 'I'm taking' and 'I'm focusing on' which are appropriate.

× If it has to be urban parts then I would like to take photos of the night light where it's dark and the lights are beautiful, and if it's on rural areas I would like to take photos of sun setting.

✓ If it's in urban areas, I would like to take photos of night lights when it's dark because the lights are beautiful; if it's in rural areas, I would like to take photos of sunsets.

Use 'in urban areas' rather than 'urban parts'. 'Night light' should be 'night lights' and 'sun setting' should be 'sunsets'. 'Where it's dark' is clearer as 'when it's dark'. Maintain conditional 'would like' but fix preposition and noun forms.

× I prefer our view in my country, especially if you go to somewhere high like the skyscraper or or tower, you could see the lights.

✓ I prefer views in my country, especially if you go somewhere high like a skyscraper or a tower, you can see the lights.

'Our view in my country' mixes pronouns; use 'views in my country'. Remove duplicate 'or'. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'skyscraper' and 'tower'. Replace 'you could' with 'you can' for general truth. 'Go to somewhere high' should be 'go somewhere high'.

× It was really beautiful.

✓ They are really beautiful.

The antecedent is plural (lights or views), so use plural verb 'are' not 'was'. Use 'they' to refer to the lights or views. Maintain present tense when describing a continuing feature.

× When looking down from the hard places, the lights are really shiny and it looks like a It also resembles like a night sky.

✓ When you look down from high places, the lights are very bright and it looks like a night sky.

'Hard places' is incorrect; likely intended 'high places'. 'Shiny' is awkward for lights; use 'bright'. Remove redundant fragments 'it looks like a It also resembles like'; use single clear simile 'it looks like a night sky'. Use 'you look' for general statements or keep 'when looking' but correct nouns.