视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (singular/plural and tense), reduce redundancy, and make sentences more concise and natural. Use a clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail connected with a linking phrase.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel. For example, when I return home I often review my photos because they remind me of the experiences I had and the places I visited.

建議: Reduce hesitations and filler words, correct word choice and grammar, and provide a concise reason with one example. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word for the example.

範例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in cities and feel more comfortable there. For instance, I enjoy photographing technologically advanced cities like Tokyo and New York because their skylines and lights create striking images.

建議: Correct grammar (possessive and agreement), avoid vague phrases, and organize ideas: state preference, give a clear reason, and add a specific example. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I prefer views in other countries, particularly in Europe, because the architecture reflects long histories and intricate details. For example, I love photographing old cathedrals and narrow streets in cities like Prague because their historic features make interesting compositions.

× I like to take pictures of different views especially when I travel around the world because after I get home I look through the photos I have taken and it remind me of the experiences I had and the places I visited.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views, especially when I travel around the world, because after I get home I look through the photos I have taken and they remind me of the experiences I had and the places I visited.

The subject 'photos' is plural, so the verb must be 'remind' not 'remind' with singular agreement; originally 'it remind me' used singular pronoun 'it' incorrectly referring to plural 'photos'. Use the plural pronoun 'they' and the plural verb 'remind'. Also add commas for clarity.

× I like to see the urban areas because I live in, uh, urban areas and it's more, uh, familiar with me and, uh, I like to, uh, techno technological advanced cities, uh, such as, uh, Tokyo or Shanghai and New York.

✓ I like to see urban areas because I live in an urban area and they are more familiar to me, and I like technologically advanced cities such as Tokyo, Shanghai and New York.

Use singular 'an urban area' when referring to where you live; 'familiar with me' is incorrect — the correct pattern is 'familiar to me'. 'Techno technological advanced' is ungrammatical; use 'technologically advanced'. Also use plural 'they are' to agree with 'urban areas' and remove filler words.

× I prefer views of other countries, especially in Europe, because it's architecture is a very cool for me.

✓ I prefer views of other countries, especially in Europe, because its architecture is very cool to me.

Use the possessive pronoun 'its' (not 'it's', which means 'it is') to show ownership: 'its architecture'. Also 'is a very cool for me' is ungrammatical; say 'is very cool to me' or 'I find it very cool'.

× It's not urban, but there there have their long history for that and it's a very sophisticated that's why I like it.

✓ It is not urban, but those places have a long history and are very sophisticated, which is why I like them.

Original sentence has multiple structural errors: repeated 'there there', incorrect verb 'have their long history for that', and mismatched pronouns. Use 'those places have a long history' and match plural subject with plural verb 'are very sophisticated'. Replace 'that's why I like it' with 'which is why I like them' to refer back to plural 'places'.