聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 많이 이어지면서 명확한 주제문과 연결어가 부족합니다. 발화에 불필요한 반복(we usually, same, major)과 중간의 비문이 있어 이해가 어렵습니다. 구체적인 정보를 한두 가지로 압축하고 연결어(if/so/because 등)를 사용해 문장 구조를 명확히 하세요. 또한 3~4문장 이내로 핵심을 말하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with friends. I usually talk with my best friend after class because we study the same major. We often discuss our boyfriends and coursework, which helps us support each other.

建議: 내용이 반복되고 문장 연결이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 이야기 주제를 구체적으로 하나 또는 두 개로 정하고, 시간 표현이나 예시를 명확히 제시하세요. 연결어(For example, Recently, Besides)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 부드럽게 하고 과거·현재 시제 일관성을 유지하세요.

範例: We usually talk about our daily lives and our future careers. For example, yesterday we discussed a movie we are both watching recently, and we also compared our career plans since we share the same major.

建議: 의견은 분명하지만 표현이 불완전하고 반복이 많습니다. 이유를 하나 또는 두 개로 정리하고 구체적인 설명을 덧붙이세요. 연결어(because, so, when)를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 확실히 하며 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

範例: I prefer chatting with just one friend because I can talk more deeply about personal topics. When I speak with a group, it is hard to focus on one conversation and say what I really want.

建議: 주장과 이유는 있으나 표현이 어색하고 문장이 끊깁니다. ‘body language cannot be conveyed well online’ 같은 완전한 문장으로 명확히 표현하세요. 또한 한두 개의 구체적 예(eye contact, tone)를 들어 설득력을 높이세요.

範例: I prefer face-to-face communication because we can share thoughts more deeply and notice nonverbal cues. For instance, eye contact and tone help me understand emotions better than messages or social media.

建議: 문법 오류와 반복이 많고 문장이 미완성입니다. ‘argue about differences in opinion’처럼 표현을 다듬고, 예시를 완전한 문장으로 마무리하세요. 또한 갈등을 해결하는 방법( compromise, take turns)을 한 문장 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, we sometimes argue about differences in opinion, especially about small things like food. For example, I might want Korean food while my friend prefers Chinese, but we usually compromise by taking turns or choosing a restaurant we both like.

× Yes, I really love chatting with friends I usually chat with my best friend after the class and we usually talk about our boyfriends and our major we are the same we are major in same disciplines so the.

✓ Yes, I really love chatting with friends. I usually chat with my best friend after class, and we usually talk about our boyfriends and our major because we study in the same discipline.

The original contains run-on sentences and unclear phrasing. Separate independent clauses with periods or conjunctions. Use 'after class' (no 'the') and 'study in the same discipline' is clearer than 'are major in same disciplines'. Combine ideas logically to improve coherence.

× We usually talk about our daily life and our career and yesterday we talked about umm the movie which we watch it nowadays and also sometimes we chat about our career.

✓ We usually talk about our daily lives and our careers. Yesterday we talked about a movie that we are watching these days, and sometimes we also chat about our careers.

Use plural nouns 'daily lives' and 'careers' to match 'we'. Avoid redundant object pronoun 'it' after 'watch'. Use 'that we are watching these days' (present continuous) to indicate an ongoing action. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× We have same major so our dream job is umm similar each other so.

✓ We have the same major, so our dream jobs are similar to each other's.

Include the definite article 'the' in 'the same major'. 'Dream jobs' should be plural to match 'we'. Use 'similar to each other's' to correctly express mutual similarity; 'similar each other' is not grammatical.

× I prefer to chat with a friend, only one friend because umm, I can share much more things with friend umm.

✓ I prefer to chat with one friend because I can share many more things with a friend.

Use 'many more things' instead of 'much more things' ('many' for countable nouns). Use article 'a friend'. Simplify redundancy 'a friend, only one friend' to 'one friend'.

× If you talk with many friends, umm, you can't concentrate only one person.

✓ If you talk with many friends, you can't concentrate on just one person.

Add preposition 'on' after 'concentrate' and use 'just one person' for clarity. Present tense is fine but requires correct preposition.

× Also you can chat about what you wanted to.

✓ Also, you can chat about whatever you want to talk about.

Mix of past 'wanted to' and present context is incorrect. Use present 'want' for general statement. 'Whatever you want to talk about' is a natural phrasing.

× I prefer to communicate face to face.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face.

The sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Preference is expressed in present simple.

× It's because we, I think we can share our thoughts, umm, face to face more profoundly.

✓ I think we can share our thoughts more profoundly face to face.

Remove redundant 'It's because we' and reposition 'face to face' after 'profoundly' for natural word order. Keep present simple 'think' for opinion.

× And our body language cannot be, umm, cannot be actually umm.

✓ And our body language cannot be conveyed properly online.

Original repeats 'cannot be' and lacks an object. Use 'conveyed properly online' to express intended meaning; choose appropriate adverb and verb.

× I usually argue with my friend about our the difference of our thoughts.

✓ I usually argue with my friend about the differences in our opinions.

Remove redundant possessive 'our the'. Use 'differences in our opinions' which is natural English. 'Thoughts' -> 'opinions' fits collocation.

× For example, I want to eat some some Korean food but my friend want to eat Chinese food and but we try to.

✓ For example, I want to eat some Korean food, but my friend wants to eat Chinese food, and we try to compromise.

Use third person singular 'wants' to agree with 'my friend'. Remove duplicate 'some'. Finish the sentence with a clear verb phrase like 'try to compromise' instead of trailing off.