聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “live in different countries” and “time zones don’t match”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. Because many of them live in different countries, our time zones often don’t match, so we usually text or use messaging apps to keep in touch.

建議: Organize ideas and avoid repetition. Give a topic sentence and then two specific examples with linking words. Use correct possessives and article/noun agreement (e.g., “my parents”).

範例: We usually chat about our daily routines and career plans. For example, we discuss upcoming job opportunities and personal goals, and sometimes we update each other on our parents’ health or reminisce about shared memories.

建議: Remove fillers and make the contrast clear using linking words like “when” and “but”. Keep sentences short and natural. Provide a clear topic sentence and one supporting reason for each preference.

範例: It depends on the situation. When the topic concerns everyone, I prefer chatting in a group, but if the conversation is personal, I choose to speak one-on-one.

建議: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with your preference, give a clear reason, then acknowledge exceptions briefly. Correct redundancy (remove repeated phrases like “time zones”).

範例: I prefer face-to-face conversations because facial expressions help communication, but because of hectic schedules and different time zones, we often use social media or video calls instead.

建議: Clarify the causes of arguments and use smoother grammar. Give one clear example and use linking words such as “for example” or “because”. Avoid filler sounds like “uh”.

範例: Yes, we sometimes argue, usually about careers or future plans because we have different priorities. For example, one friend prefers job security while another values travel, which leads to occasional disagreements.

× Yes, I have many friends and I always like to talk with them.

✓ Yes, I have many friends and I always like to talk to them.

Use 'talk to' rather than 'talk with' in English collocation; this is not strictly singular/plural but fits correction list for plurality context (no change needed for number). Suggest using 'talk to' for natural phrasing.

× Living in far away countries from mine, we prefer to do chat because we don't have our time that matches with each other that we can call or talk but I always like.

✓ Because we live in countries far from mine, we prefer to chat because our times do not match for calling, although I still like talking to them.

Original sentence has awkward structure and several problems: incorrect word order ('far away countries from mine'), unnecessary 'do' before 'chat', wrong relative clause 'we don't have our time that matches with each other', and an unfinished clause. Corrected sentence reorders phrases, removes unnecessary auxiliary, uses 'chat' as verb, and clarifies time-zone mismatch. Suggest simplify complex ideas into shorter clauses.

× We talk about our daily routines, our next goals, about career.

✓ We talk about our daily routines, our future goals, and our careers.

Original uses inconsistent noun forms and missing articles; 'next goals' should be 'future goals' and 'about career' should be plural 'careers' or 'a career'. Correction makes parallel structure and correct noun forms.

× Moreover, I like to talk with them about their parents health, They talk me about mine parents and moreover our future goals.

✓ Moreover, I like to talk with them about their parents' health; they tell me about my parents and about our future goals.

Errors: missing possessive apostrophe ('parents' health'), incorrect reporting verb and word order ('They talk me' should be 'they tell me'), wrong possessive 'mine parents' should be 'my parents', and run-on punctuation. Correction fixes possessives, verb choice, and adds conjunctions for clarity.

× Sometimes we like to recall our past and.

✓ Sometimes we like to recall our past.

Sentence ended with an unnecessary conjunction 'and' causing an incomplete sentence. Remove trailing 'and' to complete the sentence.

× It usually depends upon the situation.

✓ It usually depends on the situation.

Both 'depend on' and 'depend upon' exist, but 'depend on' is more common and natural here. Change for natural usage.

× Whenever we have to talk about a common topic, so I like to talk with the group of people, and whenever, uh, talk is related to someone, uh, special, I'd like to talk with him or her only.

✓ When we need to discuss a common topic, I like to talk in a group; when the conversation concerns someone special, I prefer to speak to that person alone.

Original has redundant conjunctions ('Whenever... so'), awkward phrasing ('talk with the group of people'), filler words, and unnatural 'talk with him or her only'. Correction removes redundancy, replaces fillers, uses 'speak to' and 'alone' for clarity, and improves flow.

× I like to talk face to face at more times because I think the facial expressions are more necessary while talking.

✓ I prefer to talk face to face most of the time because I think facial expressions are more important when talking.

'At more times' is incorrect; use 'most of the time'. 'More necessary' is awkward; 'more important' is natural. 'While talking' -> 'when talking' is smoother.

× But due to our hectic schedules and different time zones, time zones as I have earlier said, we have to talk through social media.

✓ But because of our hectic schedules and different time zones, as I said earlier, we have to use social media to talk.

Redundancy ('time zones' repeated) and awkward clause placement. 'Due to' better as 'because of' in this context. Repositioned parenthetical phrase and simplified 'talk through social media' to 'use social media to talk'.

× But yes, there are. We do the video call sometimes.

✓ Yes, we do video calls sometimes.

Original 'But yes, there are.' is an incomplete fragment. Combine into a single clear sentence and use plural 'video calls' for general habit.

× Yes, it sometimes happens when UH talk becomes an argument over some topics related to career.

✓ Yes, it sometimes happens when a discussion becomes an argument over topics related to careers.

'UH' is a filler; remove it. 'talk becomes an argument' is awkward—use 'discussion becomes an argument'. 'Related to career' -> 'related to careers' or 'career issues'. Correction clarifies meaning.

× Related to future goals are either some past memory which is for which our views don't match.

✓ Sometimes arguments are about future goals or past memories about which our views differ.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and confused in word order. Recast to a clear subject ('arguments') and parallel objects ('future goals or past memories') and use 'about which our views differ' for correct relative clause.