聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "Yes, chatting with friends is an important part of my daily life because it helps me feel connected and updated about their lives."

範例: Yes, chatting with friends is an important part of my daily life because it helps me feel connected and updated about their lives.

建議: Improve coherence by using linking words and avoid informal phrases like 'jam in'. Also, be more specific and concise. For example, "We usually discuss work-related issues, such as challenges with our boss or colleagues, and sometimes we share solutions. We also talk about trending topics on social media."

範例: We usually discuss work-related issues, such as challenges with our boss or colleagues, and sometimes we share solutions. We also talk about trending topics on social media.

建議: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example, "I prefer one-on-one conversations because they allow deeper discussions, whereas group chats can be distracting due to differing opinions."

範例: I prefer one-on-one conversations because they allow deeper discussions, whereas group chats can be distracting due to differing opinions.

建議: Use more formal language and correct grammar. Also, link your ideas smoothly. For example, "I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to see facial expressions and maintain eye contact. In contrast, online conversations can be disrupted by technical issues like poor Wi-Fi."

範例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to see facial expressions and maintain eye contact. In contrast, online conversations can be disrupted by technical issues like poor Wi-Fi.

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to show sequence. For example, "Sometimes we have different opinions which lead to arguments, but they are usually short. Afterwards, we try to refocus on the topic and make each other feel better."

範例: Sometimes we have different opinions which lead to arguments, but they are usually short. Afterwards, we try to refocus on the topic and make each other feel better.

× I would be bored and I would feel lonely if I have no one to talk to me.

✓ I would be bored and I would feel lonely if I had no one to talk to.

The sentence expresses a hypothetical situation in the present or future, so the correct form is the past subjunctive 'had' instead of 'have' after 'if'. Also, 'talk to me' is redundant; 'talk to' suffices.

× So making a conversation about our daily stories make me feel like I'm still alive and I can update my friend's life too.

✓ So making a conversation about our daily stories makes me feel like I'm still alive and I can update my friends' lives too.

The subject 'making a conversation' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also, 'friend's life' should be plural possessive 'friends' lives' because it refers to multiple friends.

× So now we talk and we discuss and maybe we think of some solutions for the problems that we are facing.

✓ So now we talk, discuss, and maybe think of some solutions for the problems that we are facing.

When listing verbs with the same subject, it's better to use parallel structure without repeating 'we' and avoid unnecessary conjunctions for smoother flow.

× And even when there's drama on Facebook, we can jam in to talk about them.

✓ And even when there's drama on Facebook, we can jump in to talk about it.

'Jam in' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'jump in'. Also, 'them' should be 'it' because 'drama' is uncountable and singular.

× I prefer to have a one-on-one conversation because it makes me feel much more comfortable when talk about something that we can dive deeper into compared to talk in a group.

✓ I prefer to have a one-on-one conversation because it makes me feel much more comfortable when talking about something that we can dive deeper into compared to talking in a group.

After 'comfortable', the verb should be in the gerund form 'talking'. Also, parallel structure requires 'talking' in both clauses.

× A lot of people have different opinions so it really dis disturbance and difficult for me to pay attention to one threat.

✓ A lot of people have different opinions, so it really is disturbing and difficult for me to pay attention to one thread.

'Dis disturbance' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'disturbing'. Also, 'threat' should be 'thread' in the context of conversation. Added 'is' for correct sentence structure.

× Face to face is always my top priority 'cause I can see my friend's facial expressions and is would be better for us to maintain eye contact while speaking.

✓ Face to face is always my top priority because I can see my friends' facial expressions and it would be better for us to maintain eye contact while speaking.

'Friend's' should be plural possessive 'friends'' to match context. 'Is would be' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'it would be'. Also, avoid contractions in formal speech.

× So talking online something not kind of smooth.

✓ So talking online is not very smooth.

The original sentence lacks a verb and proper structure. Adding 'is' and rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Maybe you can have some problems with Wi-Fi connection.

✓ Maybe you can have some problems with the Wi-Fi connection.

'Wi-Fi connection' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific type of connection.