聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying "I do like chatting with my friends sometimes," say "I enjoy chatting with my friends, but only when I am free." Also, avoid repeating ideas like "sometimes" and "when I have some work to do" without linking them smoothly.

範例: I enjoy chatting with my friends, but only when I am free. When I have work to do, I prefer not to chat because it interrupts my concentration.

建議: Your answer lacks coherence and clear linking between ideas. Use linking words like "mainly," "also," and "for example" to connect your points. Be more specific and avoid short fragmented sentences. For instance, instead of listing topics abruptly, group them logically.

範例: We mainly chat about games, especially video games. We also talk about books we have read, mostly Marvel comics. Additionally, when exams approach, we discuss school subjects and exam questions.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like "whatever you have hell in your heart." Instead, say "share your deepest thoughts." Also, use linking words like "because" and "however" to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I prefer chatting with one friend because it is usually my best friend, and I can share my deepest thoughts with them. However, when chatting with a group, it is harder to express everything because there are many people.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and contains hesitations. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words like "because" and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. For example, say "I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to see the other person's facial expressions, which helps me understand them better."

範例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to see the other person's facial expressions, which helps me understand their feelings better.

建議: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more naturally and avoid repeating phrases like "a lot." Use linking words to clarify your point. For example, say "Yes, we often argue, especially about football, because we have different opinions."

範例: Yes, we often argue, especially about football, because we have different opinions on the game.

× Yes, I do like chatting with my friends sometimes, but when I have some work to do I rather not because they will just interrupt me.

✓ Yes, I do like chatting with my friends sometimes, but when I have some work to do I would rather not because they will just interrupt me.

The phrase 'I rather not' is incorrect; the correct modal verb phrase is 'I would rather not' to express preference or choice.

× About my friends. We usually chat about games mostly. Sometimes about books that we read. Marvels mostly. But we do chat about school sometimes. When we have exams we mostly talk about the questions.

✓ We usually chat mostly about games and sometimes about books that we read, mostly Marvel comics. But we also chat about school sometimes. When we have exams, we mostly talk about the questions.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. Combining related ideas into complete sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I only prefer to chat with one friend because with one it could be your best friend and you can tell him whatever you want, whatever you have hell in your heart.

✓ I only prefer to chat with one friend because with one, it could be your best friend and you can tell them whatever you want, whatever pain you have in your heart.

Using 'him' assumes the friend is male; 'them' is a gender-neutral pronoun appropriate here. Also, 'hell in your heart' is an incorrect expression; 'pain in your heart' is more appropriate.

× But with many friends you cannot ever say a lot of things because there's a lot of people.

✓ But with many friends, you cannot say many things because there are a lot of people.

The phrase 'cannot ever say a lot of things' is awkward; 'cannot say many things' is clearer. Also, 'there's' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'people'.

× I prefer to communicate face to face because face to face you're gonna know the reaction of the of the person you're talking to, umm, his facial reactions and reactions to and you gotta and you and you will have a better understanding between you 2.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because when you do, you can see the reactions of the person you're talking to, including their facial expressions, and you will have a better understanding between the two of you.

The original sentence has repetition and awkward phrasing. 'Face to face' should be used as an adverbial phrase, and 'reactions to' is incomplete. Clarifying and restructuring improves comprehension.

× That's actually the most thing we do a lot between friends. We argue a lot, especially when we we're talking about football. We're arguing like a lot of a lot of times.

✓ That's actually the thing we do most among friends. We argue a lot, especially when we're talking about football. We argue many times.

The phrase 'we we're talking' is incorrect; 'we're talking' (we are talking) is correct. Also, 'arguing like a lot of a lot of times' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'argue many times' is clearer and grammatically correct.