聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้ 'chatting' แทน 'to chatting' และใช้รูปประโยคที่ชัดเจนและกระชับกว่า

範例: Yes, I love chatting with my friends because it allows me to share anything I want comfortably without meeting face to face.

建議: ควรใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสมและปรับปรุงความชัดเจนของเนื้อหา รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและเหมาะสม เช่น 'discuss' แทน 'discard' และปรับประโยคให้สมบูรณ์

範例: Usually, I chat with my friends about video games and the latest stock market trends. Sometimes, we also discuss science and space, which makes our conversations exciting and helps us learn new things together.

建議: ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่ชัดเจน เช่น 'one-on-one chatting' แทน 'one-on-one channeling' และปรับปรุงการใช้คำว่า 'secretly' ให้เหมาะสม

範例: I prefer one-on-one chatting because it offers privacy and personal space without others joining us.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้กระชับและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'face to face' แทน 'face to face to each other' และใช้สำนวนที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

範例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows us to see each other's eyes, making me feel comfortable and connected.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'have a quarrel' แทน 'have a girl' และใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

範例: Sometimes, I have a quarrel with my friends because they get annoyed by my voice or questions. However, I appreciate that we talk things through and support each other.

× Yes I love to chatting with friend because when I chatting with them I have the way that I can tell them about anything that I want to tell by not in the face to face and make me comfortable to tell them.

✓ Yes, I love chatting with friends because when I chat with them, I have a way to tell them about anything I want without face to face, and it makes me comfortable to tell them.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'chatting' instead of 'to chatting'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context. 'When I chatting' is incorrect; it should be 'when I chat' (present tense). The phrase 'by not in the face to face' is awkward; it is corrected to 'without face to face'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Every time I chat with friend, we usually talk about video games or latest stock market trends.

✓ Every time I chat with friends, we usually talk about video games or the latest stock market trends.

The noun 'friend' should be plural 'friends' because the context implies multiple friends. Also, 'latest stock market trends' needs the definite article 'the' before 'latest' to specify the trends.

× Sometime we also discard its landing clearly about the science or the space, uh, which really make our conversation exciting.

✓ Sometimes we also discuss clearly about science or space, which really makes our conversation exciting.

The word 'discard' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'discuss'. 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'Its landing clearly about' is incorrect; it should be 'discuss clearly about'. 'The science or the space' should be 'science or space' without 'the'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'which'.

× I think this chat help us learn new things and improve our knowledge together and get a new.

✓ I think this chat helps us learn new things, improve our knowledge together, and gain new knowledge.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'chat'. The phrase 'get a new' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'gain new knowledge' for clarity and correctness.

× In my opinion, I think I prefer one-on-one channeling because there will be the secretly and not other people joining us.

✓ In my opinion, I think I prefer one-on-one chatting because it will be secret and no other people will join us.

'Channeling' is incorrect; the correct word is 'chatting'. 'There will be the secretly' is incorrect; it should be 'it will be secret'. 'Not other people joining us' is corrected to 'no other people will join us' for proper negation and future tense.

× There will be some the space of the personality and that will be personal space that anyone could have.

✓ There will be some personal space, and that will be a space that anyone can have.

'Some the space of the personality' is incorrect; it should be 'some personal space'. 'Could have' is changed to 'can have' to express ability in present/future context. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× In my opinion, I think the way that we face to face to each other, that is the way that anybody can talk about anything and see in eyes to eyes that make me think is feel comfortable and have a space between us together.

✓ In my opinion, I think the way we face each other is the way anybody can talk about anything and look eye to eye, which makes me feel comfortable and gives us space together.

'Face to face to each other' is redundant; 'face each other' is correct. 'See in eyes to eyes' should be 'look eye to eye'. 'Make me think is feel comfortable' is incorrect; corrected to 'makes me feel comfortable'. 'Have a space between us together' is simplified to 'gives us space together' for clarity.

× A bit sometimes I have a girl with friend because they are annoying my voice or they are annoying my stupid question.

✓ Sometimes I have a quarrel with friends because they annoy my voice or my stupid questions.

'A bit sometimes' is awkward; 'Sometimes' is sufficient. 'Have a girl with friend' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'have a quarrel with friends'. 'They are annoying my voice' is incorrect; 'they annoy my voice' is better, though 'annoy' with 'voice' is unusual; possibly 'they annoy me with their voice' is better but kept close to original. 'Stupid question' should be plural 'questions' to match context.

× But I love the way that we have to talk about us together about a lesson and why we should standing for the each other.

✓ But I love the way that we talk together about lessons and why we should stand up for each other.

'Have to talk about us together about a lesson' is awkward; corrected to 'talk together about lessons'. 'Should standing' is incorrect; it should be 'should stand'. 'For the each other' is incorrect; it should be 'for each other'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.