聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using complete sentences and avoiding redundancy. For example, say 'Chatting with friends helps me relieve stress and feel supported' instead of 'Chatting with friends is kind of a relief your feelings'. Also, avoid repeating negatives like 'not feel not alone'.

範例: Yes, I do. Chatting with friends helps me relieve stress and feel supported. Sometimes when I'm under a lot of pressure, I need someone to listen and share their opinion. Also, chatting helps build stronger relationships, so I don't feel alone.

建議: Focus on clarity and coherence by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: I usually chat with my friends about various topics, such as our personal lives, work, and current events. We don't stick to any particular subject; instead, we share whatever we feel comfortable discussing.

建議: Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences by practising your answers beforehand. Use linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand' to contrast ideas. Also, complete your sentences fully to make your answer clear and effective.

範例: It depends on the situation. If we need to discuss a problem, I prefer chatting with a group to hear different perspectives. However, for personal conversations, I prefer talking one-on-one because it's more private and comfortable.

建議: Make your answer more concise and avoid repeating ideas. Use clear linking words to explain your reasons. For example, say 'Although social media is convenient, I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels more secure and private.'

範例: Although technology has made social media communication easy, I prefer talking face-to-face. This is because in-person conversations feel more secure, and I worry about privacy issues like hacking or information leaks online.

建議: Work on grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast and explain that disagreements don't always lead to quarrels.

範例: Yes, I do argue with friends sometimes because we have different opinions. However, disagreements don't always lead to quarrels, and we usually resolve them peacefully.

× Chatting with friends is kind of a relief your feelings.

✓ Chatting with friends is kind of a relief for your feelings.

The verb 'relief' is a noun here and needs the preposition 'for' to correctly link it to 'your feelings'. The original sentence missed the preposition, causing a grammatical error.

× Sometimes we just under too much pressure, we need someone to listen to or give our opinion with.

✓ Sometimes we are just under too much pressure; we need someone to listen to us or give us their opinion.

The original sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'we' and has awkward phrasing. Adding 'are' corrects the verb structure, and rephrasing 'give our opinion with' to 'give us their opinion' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× And also chatting with friends can help us build a better relationship which can make us not feel not alone in the world.

✓ And also chatting with friends can help us build better relationships which can make us not feel alone in the world.

The phrase 'make us not feel not alone' contains a double negative which is incorrect. Removing the extra 'not' corrects the meaning. Also, 'a better relationship' is better as 'better relationships' to generalise the idea.

× Normally we talk about different various topics, you know, including our life, our work and also what's going on in the world.

✓ Normally we talk about various topics, you know, including our lives, our work and also what's going on in the world.

Using both 'different' and 'various' together is redundant. Choosing 'various' alone is sufficient. Also, 'our life' should be plural 'our lives' to match the plural context.

× It doesn't have to be particular topics.

✓ They don't have to be particular topics.

The subject 'topics' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' instead of 'it'. This corrects the sentence structure and subject-pronoun agreement.

× We should talk with our friends this our friends.

✓ We should talk with our friends, these are our friends.

The phrase 'this our friends' is incorrect. It should be 'these are our friends' to correctly refer to the plural noun 'friends'.

× We can share everything if we like, you know, as long as we feel comfortable with and.

✓ We can share everything if we like, you know, as long as we feel comfortable with it.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'with and' which is incorrect. It should end with 'with it' to complete the prepositional phrase properly.

× It depends on situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The noun 'situation' requires the definite article 'the' to be grammatically correct in this context.

× If we got a discussion to discuss, uh, about, uh, one problem, maybe we need a group of people to listen to different perspective from different person.

✓ If we have a discussion to discuss, uh, about, uh, one problem, maybe we need a group of people to listen to different perspectives from different people.

The verb 'got' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'have'. Also, 'perspective' and 'person' should be plural to match 'different'.

× But if, uh, we just check, uh, want to chat, you know, with our personal lives, I think one person want to talk with one person would be good choice because they can be.

✓ But if, uh, we just want to chat, you know, about our personal lives, I think one person wanting to talk with one person would be a good choice because they can be.

The phrase 'check, uh, want to chat' is incorrect and should be 'want to chat'. Also, 'with our personal lives' should be 'about our personal lives' to use the correct preposition.

× I know the technology has been advanced.

✓ I know technology has advanced.

'Technology' is an uncountable noun and does not need the definite article 'the'. Also, 'has been advanced' is passive and awkward; 'has advanced' is active and correct.

× It's easy to talk through social media, but for me I feel more secured to talk in person because, you know, the technology has been advanced, but which is also a two side thought.

✓ It's easy to talk through social media, but for me I feel more secure talking in person because, you know, technology has advanced, but which is also a two-sided thought.

'Secured' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'secure'. 'Two side thought' should be 'two-sided thought' as a compound adjective.

× It can be, you know, hacked by others, maybe your information has been leaked to others.

✓ It can be, you know, hacked by others; maybe your information has been leaked to others.

The sentence is a run-on and needs a semicolon or period to separate the two independent clauses.

× Oh, I do you know we are humans, we are not perfect, we do have a different opinions about different things.

✓ Oh, I do, you know. We are humans, we are not perfect, we do have different opinions about different things.

The original sentence lacks punctuation separating ideas. Also, 'a different opinions' is incorrect; 'different opinions' is correct without 'a'.

× Sometimes we may around 11 topic, we share our different disagreements.

✓ Sometimes we may argue about topics; we share our different disagreements.

'May around 11 topic' is incorrect. It should be 'may argue about topics'. Also, '11' seems a typo or mishearing and is replaced with 'topics' for clarity.

× It can be a argument involved, but it doesn't mean we have to quarrel with others.

✓ It can be an argument involved, but it doesn't mean we have to quarrel with others.

The article 'a' before a word starting with a vowel sound 'argument' should be 'an'.

× We still can make peace with our.

✓ We can still make peace with each other.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'our' which is incomplete. 'Each other' correctly completes the idea of mutual peace.