博物馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa natural desu ga, "umm" no you na filler ga ooku, soshite "different culture" wa "different cultures" to shite, fukusuu-kei ni suru koto ga hitsuyou desu. Motto specific na detail wo tsukau koto mo taisetsu desu. 5-bun shika tsukawanai you ni shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, definitely. Museums offer many opportunities to learn about different cultures. For example, they display artifacts and artworks that show unique traditions. This helps visitors understand diverse perspectives and ideas.

建議: "umm" no you na filler ga ooku, soshite "enormous museum and very glorious, beautiful" wa chotto fukuzatsu de, "glorious" wa kontekusuto ni awanai kamoshiremasen. "very happy" wa hito ni taisuru hyougen to shite wa fukuzatsu desu. Motto seikaku de rikai shi yasui hyougen wo tsukatte kudasai.

範例: Not many museums are in my hometown, but there is one large and beautiful museum. Many local people visit it to enjoy various exhibitions. It is a popular place for cultural activities.

建議: Answer ga incomplete de, "the" no ato ni kotoba ga tarinai desu. "umm" ya "uh" no you na filler ga ooku, sore wa yoku nai desu. Motto seikaku ni, 5-bun ijou ni shinai you ni shite, shourai no yotei ya riyuu wo tsukeru to yoi desu.

範例: Yes, my friend and I usually visit museums about twice a month, mostly on weekends. We enjoy seeing different exhibitions because it helps us learn new things and relax.

建議: "It's about one month ago" wa "I visited a museum about one month ago" to shita hou ga yoku, "painting exhibition" wa "a painting exhibition" to shite, "Those painting are coming" wa "Those paintings came" to shita hou ga tadashii desu. "a lot of famous painter" wa "many famous painters" to shimasu. Filler no tsukaimichi ni chuuishite kudasai.

範例: I visited a museum about one month ago. There was a painting exhibition featuring many famous painters from the UK. I found the artworks very impressive and inspiring.

× Museums provide lots of opportunities for people to learn from different culture and also they can umm find the different ideas from different aspects in the museum.

✓ Museums provide lots of opportunities for people to learn from different cultures and also they can umm find different ideas from different aspects in the museum.

The word 'culture' should be plural 'cultures' because it refers to multiple types of culture. When talking about various kinds or types, the plural form is required.

× It is, umm, enormous museum and very glorious, beautiful.

✓ It is an enormous museum and very glorious, beautiful.

The indefinite article 'an' is needed before a singular noun starting with a vowel sound like 'enormous'. Omitting the article is incorrect.

× Many people living around would visit there to see different exhibitions and I think it is very happy.

✓ Many people living around would visit it to see different exhibitions and I think it is very enjoyable.

The preposition 'there' is incorrect when referring to visiting a place; 'it' is appropriate for the museum. Also, 'happy' is an adjective describing people, not a situation; 'enjoyable' better describes the experience.

× Yes, uh, me and my friend will go to museum umm maybe twice a month I think and we will umm go there on the weekends to see umm different exhibition and mostly we will see the.

✓ Yes, uh, my friend and I will go to the museum umm maybe twice a month I think and we will umm go there on the weekends to see umm different exhibitions and mostly we will see them.

The subject pronoun 'I' should be used instead of 'me' when it is the subject. Also, 'the museum' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Exhibition' should be plural 'exhibitions' to match 'different'. 'Them' is needed to refer back to 'exhibitions' instead of leaving the sentence incomplete.

× It's about one month ago and it's uh, umm, painting exhibition.

✓ It was about one month ago and it was, uh, umm, a painting exhibition.

When referring to a past event, past tense verbs 'was' are required instead of 'is'. Also, 'a' is needed before 'painting exhibition' as it is singular and countable.

× Those painting are coming from the UK and umm, it's a lot of umm, famous painter of those exhibition and it's very impressive.

✓ Those paintings are coming from the UK and umm, there are a lot of umm, famous painters in that exhibition and it's very impressive.

'Painting' should be plural 'paintings' to match 'those'. 'It's a lot of' is incorrect; 'there are a lot of' is correct for plural nouns. 'Painter' should be plural 'painters' to match 'a lot of'. 'Of those exhibition' is incorrect; 'in that exhibition' is the correct prepositional phrase.