图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you go often, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (why and what you do there). Use correct tense and simple linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often went to the university library when I studied in Indonesia. It was a very large and comfortable library, so I liked to study there. I usually went there to revise for exams and to borrow books for my assignments.

建議: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then give two specific activities using clear phrases and linking words (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Also'). Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Keep sentences short and natural.

範例: In the library I usually do two main things. Firstly, I work on assignments and study quietly. Also, I often read books I borrow from the library to prepare for my classes.

建議: Give a clear past-tense response: say whether you went and when you started. Use simple, correct grammar and one or two specific details (e.g., what you remember about the school library). Avoid unclear phrases like 'so deeper.'

範例: Not at first — I wasn't familiar with libraries as a young child. I started visiting my elementary school library, which had a small but interesting collection. It was the first time I remember borrowing books and learning to enjoy reading.

建議: Be careful with generalizations and keep statements accurate and neutral. Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No/It depends), then give a reason and an example. Use correct plural forms and simple linking words. Avoid speculation about families' wealth unless you can support it; instead say 'many' or 'some' and explain why (e.g., cultural emphasis on studying).

範例: It depends, but many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially in cities. There is a strong cultural emphasis on education and parents often encourage reading, so children who live near public or school libraries tend to use them regularly.

× When I studied in a bigger university in Indonesia, there has a big library, one of the big library that I ever visited.

✓ When I studied at a larger university in Indonesia, there was a big library, one of the biggest libraries I have ever visited.

Uses past context 'When I studied' so verbs should be past: 'has' is incorrect; use 'was'. 'Bigger university' should be 'a larger university'. 'One of the big library that I ever visited' has article and number errors; use plural 'libraries' and 'one of the biggest libraries I have ever visited' or keep past 'I had ever visited'. Suggestion: match tense and correct noun number and word choice.

× I'm frequently visit the library because so comfortable and I usually take an exam on that.

✓ I frequently visited the library because it was so comfortable, and I usually took exams there.

Mixed present continuous 'I'm frequently visit' is wrong. With past context use past simple 'visited'. 'So comfortable' needs subject 'it was so comfortable'. 'I usually take an exam on that' should be 'I usually took exams there' or 'I usually took an exam there' to use proper preposition and plural. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct pronoun and preposition.

× Two kind of activities that I used to do in a library are I'm working to work a task and especially I also read a book that I borrow from the library.

✓ Two kinds of activities I used to do in the library were doing tasks and especially reading books I borrowed from the library.

Sentence has wrong word order, tense and forms: 'Two kind' should be 'Two kinds'; 'that I used to do in a library are' is awkward—use past 'were'. 'I'm working to work a task' is ungrammatical; use gerund 'doing tasks'. 'I also read a book that I borrow' mixes past and present; use past 'reading books I borrowed'. Suggestion: use plural nouns, consistent past tense, and parallel list structure.

× When I was a child, I'm not familiar with library, but in my elementary school I began to come to the library that the collection of my elementary school library is so deeper, and I think that it was my first time to visit library in my life.

✓ When I was a child, I was not familiar with libraries, but in elementary school I began to go to the library; the collection in my elementary school library was quite extensive, and I think that was the first time I visited a library in my life.

Mixed tenses: 'When I was a child' requires past 'I was not familiar'. 'Library' should be plural 'libraries' or 'the library' depending on meaning. 'I began to come to the library' is unnatural; use 'began to go to the library'. 'The collection ... is so deeper' is incorrect: use past 'was quite extensive' or 'was much larger'. 'First time to visit library' should be 'first time I visited a library'. Suggestion: maintain past tense, use correct adjective forms and articles.

× I think that most of the Chinese kid that I've ever known was a rich family that I think that it relate to the highest education that ever did by the parents.

✓ I think that most of the Chinese kids I have known came from rich families, which I think is related to the high value parents place on education.

Errors in quantifiers and agreement: 'most of the Chinese kid' should be 'most of the Chinese kids'. 'I've ever known was a rich family' mixes singular/plural; use 'came from rich families'. 'It relate to the highest education that ever did by the parents' is ungrammatical; rewrite to 'is related to the high value parents place on education'. Suggestion: ensure plural agreement and use clearer phrasing for cause.

× I think China's kid was too familiar with the library since they are they were in a childhood.

✓ I think Chinese children are familiar with libraries from early childhood.

Pronoun and tense confusion: 'China's kid' should be 'Chinese children' (plural). 'Was too familiar' is odd; 'are familiar' or 'have been familiar' works depending on meaning. 'Since they are they were in a childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'from early childhood'. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns and concise time expressions.