图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and incorrect word choices (e.g., "these days", "in person", not "in the rivalry"). Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Improve grammar: past vs present ("I used to" for past habit).

範例: These days I don't often go to the library because the internet is more convenient. For example, I can download PDFs and e-books and read them at home, so I rarely need to visit in person. I used to go more often when I was studying at university.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and coherent supporting details. Use correct tense and linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "especially before"). Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Be specific about activities (study, research, borrow books).

範例: When I was at university I usually visited the library twice a week to study and do research because it had a quiet atmosphere and good air conditioning. As a result, I could concentrate better, and I went even more often before exams to review notes and practice past papers.

建議: Answer directly then give a specific contrast between childhood and university. Fix grammar ("didn't go to the library often", "I used it a lot at university"). Keep within 1–3 supporting sentences and finish thoughts completely.

範例: I didn't go to the library very often as a child, but I used it a lot at university. The university library had a quiet, focused atmosphere that helped me concentrate on coursework and research, so I spent several hours there most weekdays.

建議: Make a clearer opinion statement and support it with specific reasons and a comparison. Use correct vocabulary and phrasing ("libraries", "offer stories and homework resources"). Use linking words ("for example", "however").

範例: I think many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially before and after school, because libraries offer storybooks, novels and homework resources. For example, children in big cities probably go more often than those in rural areas because urban libraries are more accessible and better stocked.

× I do not often go to the library because this day Internet is more convenient.

✓ I do not often go to the library because nowadays the Internet is more convenient.

Incorrect present-tense/time expression and missing article: 'this day' is unnatural; use 'nowadays' for current general situations and include 'the' before 'Internet'. Use present simple for habitual action.

× I can find PDF file and ebook online and read them at home, so I rarely need to visit in person in the rivalry.

✓ I can find PDF files and e-books online and read them at home, so I rarely need to visit in person at the library.

Countable nouns require correct plural or hyphenation: 'PDF file' should be plural 'PDF files'; 'ebook' is better written 'e-books'. 'Rivalry' is incorrect word choice; use 'library'. Preposition should be 'at the library'.

× Actually I used to.

✓ Actually I used to go.

Incomplete sentence lacks main verb. 'Used to' must be followed by base verb to indicate past habit; add 'go' to complete meaning.

× I usually visit the library twice a week when I was at university because it had a quiet atmosphere and good air condition.

✓ I usually visited the library twice a week when I was at university because it had a quiet atmosphere and good air conditioning.

Tense mismatch: 'usually' with past context should be past simple 'visited' because sentence refers to university time. 'Air condition' is incorrect noun; use 'air conditioning'.

× Which concept which uh take me concentrate on my homework or research?

✓ It helped me concentrate on my homework or research.

Fragment and incorrect word choice: original is ungrammatical. Replace with a clear clause showing cause: 'It helped me concentrate...' which fits context.

× I went especially often when the exam coming up as.

✓ I went especially often when exams were coming up.

Tense and word order: use past continuous 'were coming up' to describe an approaching event in the past. Remove extraneous words 'as' and pluralize 'exam' to 'exams' for generality.

× I did not go to library often when I was a kid, but I use it a lot when I study at university.

✓ I did not go to the library often when I was a kid, but I used it a lot when I studied at university.

Tense consistency: both clauses refer to past, so use past simple 'used' and 'studied'. Also include article 'the' before 'library'.

× The library was really quiet place and good atmosphere which helped me concentrate my work or my research, so I I often spend.

✓ The library was a really quiet place with a good atmosphere which helped me concentrate on my work or my research, so I often spent time there.

Missing article 'a' before 'really quiet place'; 'good atmosphere' needs preposition 'with'. 'Concentrate' requires preposition 'on'. Sentence fragments: 'I I often spend' is incomplete—use past tense 'spent time there'.

× I guess that many shouldn't many Chinese children do visit the rivalry, especially before and after school, because library offer story, novel or homework resource and moreover, I think children in big city tend to go more often than in rural.

✓ I guess that many Chinese children do visit the library, especially before and after school, because libraries offer stories, novels, or homework resources; moreover, I think children in big cities tend to go more often than those in rural areas.

Numerous errors: remove 'shouldn't many'; use plural 'libraries' and plural nouns 'stories, novels, resources'. Use correct noun 'library' not 'rivalry'. Add articles and plural forms 'big cities' and 'rural areas' and compare with 'those in rural areas'.

× because library offer story, novel or homework resource and moreover, I think children in big city tend to go more often than in rural.

✓ because libraries offer stories, novels, or homework resources, and moreover, I think children in big cities tend to go more often than those in rural areas.

Preposition and noun errors: add plural form and correct preposition 'in big cities' and compare with 'those in rural areas'. Ensure parallel structure and include articles where needed.