图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to contrast past and present, and avoid repetition. Correct articles and plural forms (e.g., "the library", "a car"). Limit to 3–4 sentences and give one specific reason now and one specific memory from Japan.

範例: No, I don't go to the library often now because the nearest one is far from my house and I don't have a car or bike. However, when I lived in Japan I visited the library frequently because it was within walking distance and had many books I liked.

建議: Clarify and organize your points: start with a topic sentence about your main activity, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct vocabulary ("library" not "lively", "look at" or "choose" books rather than "watch") and avoid vague phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I usually read when I go to the library and look for books for my children. For example, the children’s section has a wide variety of picture books and educational stories, so I often choose new ones to take home and read together.

建議: Fix grammar and coherence. Start with a clear statement, then provide specific supporting details and use linking words (e.g., "because", "and"). Avoid unclear phrases like "my mother was a attitude"; replace with a concrete description of your mother’s behaviour. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I loved going to the library with my mother because she encouraged me to choose books and read aloud to me, which helped me develop a love of reading and created many happy memories.

建議: Be direct and avoid hedging. Start with a clear opinion, then give a reason or example. Use linking words like "however" or "for example" and avoid repeating phrases. Be specific about contexts (e.g., in your city or community) to strengthen your answer.

範例: I think many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially in cities where public libraries are accessible. For example, in my Australian city I see Chinese families using the library for homework and borrowing children’s books.

× Uh, no, I don't go to library.

✓ Uh, no, I don't go to the library.

The noun 'library' is a specific place and requires the definite article 'the'. Use 'the library' when referring to a known location. Suggestion: always include 'the' before singular, specific, countable places (the school, the office).

× Now I'm in Australia and the library is very far from my house, so it's hard for me to go there because I don't have cars, bicycles.

✓ Now I'm in Australia and the library is very far from my house, so it's hard for me to go there because I don't have a car or a bicycle.

'Cars, bicycles' is plural and uncounted here; the speaker means they do not own any of these items. Use singular with articles or use 'any' with plurals: 'I don't have a car or a bicycle' or 'I don't have any cars or bicycles.' This clarifies ownership and is grammatically correct.

× But when I was in Japan, I always went to library.

✓ But when I was in Japan, I always went to the library.

Same issue as before: 'library' refers to a specific, known place so the definite article 'the' is required.

× It's a very fun place for me.

✓ It's a very fun/place I enjoy visiting.

While 'It's a very fun place for me' is understandable, 'for me' is awkward here. Better: 'It's a very fun place' or 'It's a place I enjoy visiting.' This improves naturalness and subject-verb flow.

× Of course, I enjoy reading that.

✓ Of course, I enjoy reading there.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrect when referring to a location; use the adverb 'there' to indicate place. 'Reading there' means reading at that location.

× Lively is a very good place to find the good books for me and I also like to watch the books for my children.

✓ The library is a very good place to find books for me, and I also like to look for books for my children.

'Lively' seems to be a miswording; 'the library' fits the context. 'Find the good books for me' is redundant; use 'find books for me.' 'Watch the books' is incorrect; 'look for books' or 'choose books' is correct. This correction fixes word choice and sentence flow.

× They are a variety of books for children and actually I love to go there with the children.

✓ There is a variety of books for children, and actually I love to go there with my children.

'They are a variety of books' is incorrect structure; use 'There is/are' for existence. Also 'the children' is vague; likely 'my children' is intended. Use 'there are a variety of books' or 'there is a variety of children's books.'

× Yes, when I was a child, I really loved to go to the library with my mother.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I really loved going to the library with my mother.

Both 'loved to go' and 'loved going' are possible, but 'loved going' is more natural for habitual past actions. Use the gerund to express enjoyment of an activity in the past.

× My mother was a attitude and she taught me how to read books and she also talked about a very, very interesting actually a library created lasting memories for me.

✓ My mother had a positive attitude; she taught me how to read books and often talked about the library, which created lasting memories for me.

Original is ungrammatical: 'was a attitude' is wrong; use 'had an attitude' or better 'had a positive attitude.' The clause ordering is confusing. 'Which' links the library to creating lasting memories. Break into clear clauses and use articles correctly.

× Actually I don't know the Chinese children very well, but I'm living in the Australia and there are a lot of Chinese people here, so I guess many Chinese children are also likely to go to the library to study or just read books.

✓ Actually I don't know Chinese children very well, but I'm living in Australia and there are a lot of Chinese people here, so I guess many Chinese children are also likely to go to the library to study or just read books.

Remove 'the' before 'Chinese children' and before 'Australia'—countries and general plural groups do not need 'the' here. Use 'Chinese children' not 'the Chinese children' when speaking generally.