图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and balanced. Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid absolute words like “irrelevant” and reduce repetition (e.g., avoid repeating ‘search’ and ‘read’).

範例: I rarely go to the library these days. Mainly I use my smartphone to find books or read e-books quickly, so I usually search online for a specific title or author. However, I still visit the library sometimes when I need a quiet place to study.

建議: Organize the answer with a clear opening sentence and use linking words to list activities. Be specific about the type of homework or why you nap (e.g., noisy dorm). Avoid filler phrases and long convoluted clauses.

範例: Usually I use the library to study with classmates and complete assignments, especially group projects or research. Also, if I have a long break between classes, I sometimes rest there because the library is quiet and comfortable.

建議: Remove fillers and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear past statement, then give two specific supporting details (e.g., favorite activities or favorite book). This will sound more fluent and natural.

範例: Yes, I did. The library was my second-favorite place at school because my friends and I liked reading storybooks there. We usually did our homework together and sometimes borrowed books for weekend reading.

建議: Avoid speculative or colloquial remarks. Answer directly with a cautious but structured statement, using linking words to explain your uncertainty and giving a reasonable generalisation or an example. Do not mention calling a friend — keep it test-appropriate.

範例: I'm not sure because I'm not from China, but I would guess that many Chinese children visit libraries or study centres frequently because education is highly valued there. For example, they often use libraries for extra study or exam preparation.

× No, I really don't, because nowadays libraries are irrelevant.

✓ No, I really don't, because nowadays libraries are irrelevant.

This sentence is acceptable in present tense; no grammatical change required. It uses present simple correctly to state a general opinion.

× We have our smartphones to use whenever we want to read something.

✓ We have our smartphones to use whenever we want to read something.

This sentence is grammatically correct; the infinitive 'to use' and present simple 'want' are appropriate for habitual actions.

× We can just search in Google, but the name of the book and the author, and right away you'll be able to read ebooks or that particular book that you're looking for there.

✓ We can just search on Google by the book title and author, and right away you'll be able to read ebooks or that particular book you're looking for there.

Use 'search on Google' (common collocation) and simplify the conjunctions. Removed the extra 'and' to avoid run-on coordination and tightened the relative clause for clarity.

× I usually go to the library to do my homework with my classmates and if I have a break in between classes, what I do is I go there and take a nap and there that's what I do inside the library.

✓ I usually go to the library to do my homework with my classmates, and if I have a break between classes, I go there to take a nap.

Original is repetitive and has awkward structure ('what I do is'). Combine ideas with a clear coordinate structure and remove redundancy ('in between' -> 'between', avoid repeating 'there').

× Uh, yes. Uh, library has been my second favorite place at school and my classmates and I spend time together there.

✓ Uh, yes. The library was my second favorite place at school, and my classmates and I spent time together there.

Use definite article 'the library' when referring to a specific library. Past tense 'was' and 'spent' should be used because the question asks about being a kid (past time).

× Although we are not allowed to really play inside the library, uh, we just read our favorite books and especially, umm, do our homework.

✓ Although we were not allowed to play inside the library, we just read our favorite books and did our homework.

Match past tense ('were not allowed', 'did') to timeframe. 'Really' and 'especially' are unnecessary here and create awkward emphasis; removing them clarifies the sentence.

× To be honest, I don't know because I'm not from China, but as far as I know, Chinese students are so into their academics or improving their academics.

✓ To be honest, I don't know because I'm not from China, but as far as I know, Chinese students are very focused on their academics.

Replace 'so into their academics or improving their academics' with 'very focused on their academics' for idiomatic phrasing and correct pronoun reference. 'So into' is colloquial and 'improving their academics' is awkward.

× So the answer will probably yes.

✓ So the answer will probably be yes.

Modal/auxiliary 'will' requires the verb 'be' before the adjective 'yes'. Insert 'be' to form correct future/modal prediction.

× And I'm gonna call my friend later to ask.

✓ And I'm going to call my friend later to ask.

Use standard 'going to' rather than informal 'gonna' in formal speaking; this aligns with future intention. Grammatically 'gonna' is colloquial but not standard.

× He's from China and he might know better than I do.

✓ He's from China and he might know better than I do.

This sentence is grammatically correct; pronoun usage 'I do' is proper for comparison. No change required.