图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and keep your sentences concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library. Usually, I visit the one near my home, but during weekdays, I use the library at my school dormitory because it is convenient for studying.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to organize your ideas and be specific about your activities. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

範例: In the library, I usually do two things. First, I read books that interest me, such as history or social studies. Second, I work on my assignments and research information for my homework.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using correct grammar and linking words.

範例: Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid. My parents loved reading and often took me there. They encouraged me to read comic books and other interesting materials.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more concise. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: Yes, I believe many Chinese children often go to the library because education is highly valued in China. They usually read books and study there to improve their knowledge.

× Umm and what can I usually go to the library which is nearby my home and in the weekdays I live in the dormitory, so I usually use the library which is located in my school.

✓ Umm, I usually go to the library which is near my home, and on weekdays I live in the dormitory, so I usually use the library located in my school.

The phrase 'what can I usually go' is incorrect; 'can' is unnecessary here and 'go' should be in the base form without modal. Also, 'nearby' should be 'near' as a preposition. 'In the weekdays' should be 'on weekdays' because 'on' is the correct preposition for days. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I usually do 2 kind of things firstly I usually write some books which is really really really interested in me like a history or society book.

✓ I usually do two kinds of things. Firstly, I usually read some books which I am really interested in, like history or social science books.

'2 kind of things' should be 'two kinds of things' because 'kinds' is plural when referring to multiple types. 'Write some books' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'read' when referring to books. 'Which is really interested in me' is incorrect; it should be 'which I am really interested in' to correctly express interest.

× And also another thing that I usually do in library is I'm doing my assignment and assessment because I have a lot of homework to do and I need some information to research so I usually.

✓ Another thing I usually do in the library is doing my assignments and assessments because I have a lot of homework to do and I need information to research, so I usually go there.

'I'm doing' should be 'doing' to match the sentence structure. 'Assignment and assessment' should be plural 'assignments and assessments' to match the context. 'Information to research' is acceptable but 'information for research' is more natural. The sentence was incomplete; added 'go there' to complete the thought.

× Yeah, of course, because my mom and my mom and dad are really into was really into go to library because they really like I'm searching something or reading something, which is really important to the society issue.

✓ Yeah, of course, because my mom and dad were really into going to the library because they really liked searching for something or reading something, which was really important to social issues.

'Are really into was really into' is contradictory; past tense 'were really into' is correct. 'Go to library' should be 'going to the library' as a gerund after 'into'. 'They really like I'm searching' is incorrect; it should be 'they really liked searching'. 'Society issue' should be 'social issues' for correct adjective and plural form.

× So when they went to the library, they always bring me and make me read some comic book or kind of really.

✓ So when they went to the library, they always brought me and made me read some comic books or something similar.

'Bring' and 'make' should be in past tense 'brought' and 'made' to agree with 'went'. 'Comic book' should be plural 'comic books' as it implies multiple. 'Kind of really' is unclear; replaced with 'something similar' for clarity.

× I think so, because China is a country which many people think education is really important and serious issue in there.

✓ I think so, because China is a country where many people think education is a really important and serious issue.

'Serious issue' should be singular to match 'a really important and serious issue'. 'In there' is unnecessary and incorrect; 'where' is the correct relative pronoun for places.

× So I think many Chinese students and child are really into going to library and read some books and study something as a child.

✓ So I think many Chinese students and children are really into going to the library, reading books, and studying as children.

'Child' should be plural 'children' to match 'students'. 'Going to library' should be 'going to the library' with the definite article. Parallel structure requires gerunds: 'going', 'reading', 'studying'. 'As a child' should be 'as children' to agree with plural subjects.