图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误，如“library is a place which can makes me”应为“library is a place which can make me”。表达不够自然，且句子较长，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余。可以增加连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: Yes, I often go to the library because it helps me concentrate on my studies without distractions. Moreover, I think it is a peaceful place where young people can enjoy quiet time.

建議: 回答中存在语法和用词错误，如“take some my own books”应为“bring my own books”，“expand my broaden horizon”表达不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子结构，同时使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: I usually bring my own books and borrow others to improve my knowledge and broaden my horizons. Also, the library is a quiet and comfortable place that helps me focus on my studies.

建議: 回答中表达不清晰，如“because our sports at home”不明确。建议使用更准确的表达，避免口语化和不连贯的句子。可以增加连接词使内容更连贯。

範例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because there were few activities at home. The library was a great place to spend time, and I especially enjoyed borrowing colorful and interesting picture books.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构混乱，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法和词汇，避免重复，增强逻辑性。

範例: Yes, Chinese children often visit libraries because their parents believe reading is a good habit. Reading helps them gain knowledge and understand the world better.

× From my perspective, library is a place which can makes me concentrate on my studying quietly and effectively without any distraction.

✓ From my perspective, the library is a place which can make me concentrate on my studying quietly and effectively without any distraction.

这里缺少定冠词“the”，因为特指图书馆；动词makes应为make，因为主语是which指代library，单数，动词用单数形式，但makes后面多余，应为make。

× From my perspective, library is a place which can makes me concentrate on my studying quietly and effectively without any distraction.

✓ From my perspective, the library is a place which can make me concentrate on my studying quietly and effectively without any distraction.

动词makes错误，should be make，因为can后面接动词原形。

× In particular, I think it is a good place for youngsters to enjoy their peaceful.

✓ In particular, I think it is a good place for youngsters to enjoy their peace.

peace是名词，peaceful是形容词，句中应使用名词peace。

× I always take some my own books and borrow others books in the library to improve my knowledge, expand my broaden horizon.

✓ I always take some of my own books and borrow others' books in the library to improve my knowledge and broaden my horizon.

some my own books应为some of my own books；others books应为others' books；expand my broaden horizon中broaden是动词，应改为broaden my horizon。

× I always take some my own books and borrow others books in the library to improve my knowledge, expand my broaden horizon.

✓ I always take some of my own books and borrow others' books in the library to improve my knowledge and broaden my horizon.

expand my broaden horizon中broaden是动词，expand和broaden重复，应去掉expand，使用broaden my horizon。

× In addition, the library can help me to focus on my own study.

✓ In addition, the library can help me focus on my own study.

help后面接动词原形，不需要to。

× Yes, I always went to the library when I was a kid because our sports at home, so the library is a good place for me to kill the time and enjoy myself.

✓ Yes, I always went to the library when I was a kid because we had no sports facilities at home, so the library was a good place for me to kill time and enjoy myself.

原句中our sports at home不完整，需补充说明；kill the time应为kill time；时态应保持一致，library is改为was。

× Yes, I always went to the library when I was a kid because our sports at home, so the library is a good place for me to kill the time and enjoy myself.

✓ Yes, I always went to the library when I was a kid because we had no sports facilities at home, so the library was a good place for me to kill time and enjoy myself.

our sports不明确，应改为we had no sports facilities。

× They are very colorful and interesting that can be borrowed in the library.

✓ They are very colorful and interesting and can be borrowed in the library.

that连接词用法错误，应使用and连接两个并列句。

× Read books can provide their horizon and knowledge and raise a better understanding of the world, and many experienced people will share their insights and understanding of the world for people, and people can get a good habit.

✓ Reading books can broaden their horizons and knowledge and improve their understanding of the world. Many experienced people share their insights and understanding of the world with others, helping people develop good habits.

read books应改为reading books；their horizon应为their horizons；raise a better understanding应为improve their understanding；share...for people应为share...with others；get a good habit应为develop good habits。