图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 있으나, 문장이 다소 길고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 좀 더 간결하고 명확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I often go to the local library to read various books during my free time because it is very convenient.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

範例: Yes, I often go to the local library during my free time because it is convenient and has a wide selection of books.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 정확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요.

範例: I usually read various books like self-development books, novels, and essays. Also, the library helps me focus better when I study English.

建議: 답변이 질문에 직접 답하고 있으나, 문장 구조가 어색하고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I didn't often go to the library when I was a child because I preferred spending time with my friends. However, now I enjoy going to the library regularly.

建議: 질문에 답변하지 않고 회피하는 태도는 점수를 낮춥니다. 모르는 질문이라도 자신의 의견을 간단히 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I'm not sure, but I think some Chinese kids often go to the library to study and read books.

× I usually read different kinds of books such as self developing books or novel and essay.

✓ I usually read different kinds of books such as self-developing books, novels, and essays.

The phrase 'self developing' should be hyphenated as 'self-developing' to correctly form a compound adjective. Also, 'novel' and 'essay' should be pluralized to 'novels' and 'essays' to match the plural 'different kinds of books.'

× Plus I tend to sometimes focusing better on my English study library can provide me good at most.

✓ Plus, I tend to sometimes focus better on my English studies; the library can provide me with the most help.

The verb 'focusing' should be in base form 'focus' after 'tend to.' The sentence structure is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity. 'English study' should be 'English studies,' and 'provide me good at most' is incorrect; it should be 'provide me with the most help.'

× I don't think so. When I was young I used to enjoy my free time hanging out with my friends of me, so I didn't want to go to the library so.

✓ I don't think so. When I was young, I used to enjoy my free time hanging out with my friends, so I didn't want to go to the library.

The phrase 'friends of me' is incorrect; it should be 'my friends.' The extra 'so' at the end is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, a comma is needed after 'When I was young' for correct sentence structure.