图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が冗長で繰り返しが多いため、簡潔で自然な表現に改善しましょう。また、具体的な理由を明確に述べることが重要です。

範例: Yes, I often go to the library because I need to gather references for my graduation paper, especially biographies that are not available online.

建議: 内容が少し不明瞭で繰り返しもあります。具体的に何をしているのかを明確にし、論理的なつながりを持たせる表現を心がけましょう。

範例: Recently, I usually go to the library to read books and examine photographs that help me write my original paper.

建議: 時制の一致に注意し、過去のことを話す際は過去形を使いましょう。また、もう少し具体的な内容を加えると良いです。

範例: Yes, when I was in junior high and high school, I often went to the library to study for exams because it was a quiet place.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。簡潔で正確な文を作り、理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: In my opinion, Chinese children tend to visit libraries more often than Japanese children because they focus heavily on their studies to prepare for adulthood.

× Yes, I frequently go to the library so many times because I have to write my graduation paper, so I have to collect my references for biographies to write a question paper, so I have to go to the library so many times.

✓ Yes, I frequently go to the library because I have to write my graduation paper and collect references for biographies to write a research paper.

The phrase 'so many times' is redundant when used with 'frequently'. Also, 'question paper' is likely a mistranslation or misuse; 'research paper' fits better. The sentence is long and repetitive; simplifying improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In recent days, I usually use the library as a place for reading books because I have to check the photographies to write the original paper. So I usually use the place for reading the books.

✓ Recently, I usually use the library as a place to read books because I have to check photographs to write an original paper. So, I usually use the library for reading books.

'In recent days' is better expressed as 'Recently'. 'A place for reading books' is better as 'a place to read books'. 'Photographies' is incorrect; the correct plural is 'photographs'. 'The original paper' should be 'an original paper'. Repetition of 'use the place for reading the books' is redundant; rephrased for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a junior high school student and a high school student, I frequently go to the library to study for the examination.

✓ Yes, when I was a junior high school student and a high school student, I frequently went to the library to study for examinations.

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was...'), so the verb should be in past tense ('went' instead of 'go'). Also, 'the examination' is better as 'examinations' to generalize the context.

× As far as I know, the Chinese kids who can go to the library rather than Japanese kids because they have to learn about more about their studies in order to being a good adult, so they frequently go to the library in my opinion.

✓ As far as I know, Chinese kids go to the library more often than Japanese kids because they have to learn more about their studies in order to become good adults, so they frequently go to the library in my opinion.

The phrase 'who can go to the library rather than Japanese kids' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the library more often than Japanese kids'. 'Learn about more about' is redundant; 'learn more about' is correct. 'In order to being' should be 'in order to become'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.