图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a direct answer, then add specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, I often go to the library because I am an early bird and like to study in the morning. Moreover, I am working on my master's degree, so I use the library to write essays and prepare for the IELTS exam.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Also, try to avoid repeating similar ideas and be more specific about your activities.

範例: I usually visit the National Library of my country because it has many books. I borrow books to help me with my research and write essays more effectively.

建議: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and explain your answer clearly with linking words.

範例: Unfortunately, I never went to a library when I was a kid because my parents did not allow me to go anywhere except school.

建議: Your answer is vague and lacks specific information. Avoid irrelevant details and try to give a clear opinion supported by reasons or examples.

範例: Although I am not Chinese and have not met many Chinese children, I believe that many Chinese kids often go to the library because education is highly valued in China.

× I would say yes I am an early bird person I also want to graduate in my master so every day I go to the library and I try to write my essay and also I want to take an ielts exam so I try to improve my.

✓ I would say yes. I am an early bird. I also want to graduate with my master's degree, so every day I go to the library and try to write my essay. Also, I want to take the IELTS exam, so I try to improve my skills.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity and readability. Also, 'graduate in my master' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'graduate with my master's degree'. 'IELTS' should be capitalized as it is an acronym.

× I also want to graduate in my master so every day I go to the library and I try to write my essay and also I want to take an ielts exam so I try to improve my.

✓ I also want to graduate with my master's degree, so every day I go to the library and try to write my essay. Also, I want to take the IELTS exam, so I try to improve my skills.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect after 'graduate'. The correct preposition is 'with' when referring to obtaining a degree. Also, 'my master' should be 'my master's degree' to be grammatically correct.

× I usually go to National Library of my country and there are a lot of books and I can do my research with helping those books.

✓ I usually go to the National Library of my country. There are a lot of books, and I can do my research with the help of those books.

The sentence is a run-on and lacks articles. 'National Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'With helping those books' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'with the help of those books'. Breaking into two sentences improves clarity.

× I can do my research with helping those books.

✓ I can do my research with the help of those books.

The phrase 'with helping those books' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'with the help of those books' to indicate assistance provided by the books.

× So I borrow books from library and I can write my essay and do research.

✓ So I borrow books from the library, and I can write my essay and do research.

The phrase 'from library' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'borrow books' is correct as 'books' is plural. Adding the article improves grammatical correctness.

× So I borrow books from library and I can write my essay and do research.

✓ So I borrow books from the library, and I can write my essay and do research.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× Oh, unfortunately I have never been in a library.

✓ Oh, unfortunately, I have never been to a library.

The correct preposition with 'been' in this context is 'to' not 'in'. Also, adding commas improves sentence flow.

× When I was a kid I went to a school every day and my parents didn't. Permission to me to go anywhere except of a school.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to school every day, and my parents didn't give me permission to go anywhere except school.

'Went to a school' is better as 'went to school' when referring to attending school generally. 'Didn't. Permission to me' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'didn't give me permission'. 'Except of a school' is incorrect; correct is 'except school'. Commas added for clarity.

× my parents didn't. Permission to me to go anywhere except of a school.

✓ My parents didn't give me permission to go anywhere except school.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a verb. 'Permission to me' is incorrect; the verb 'give' is needed. Also, 'except of a school' is incorrect; 'except school' is correct.

× Oh, I'm not Chinese and I've never seen a Chinese kid, but with the improvement in China's knowledge and the development of Chinese, I can say yes, they probably go to the library.

✓ Oh, I'm not Chinese and I've never seen a Chinese kid, but with the improvement in China's education and development, I can say yes, they probably go to the library.

'Improvement in China's knowledge' is awkward; 'improvement in China's education' is more natural. 'Development of Chinese' is unclear; likely intended 'development in China'. This correction clarifies meaning and improves grammar.