图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'get my UH'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I usually go to the library twice a week, on Wednesdays and Saturdays. On Wednesdays, I read magazines to keep myself updated about current affairs and new market trends. On Saturdays, I try to borrow books.'

範例: I usually visit the library twice a week, on Wednesdays and Saturdays. On Wednesdays, I read magazines to stay updated on current affairs and market trends. Meanwhile, on Saturdays, I borrow books to read at home.

建議: Answer directly and avoid asking questions back to the examiner. Use linking words to organise your answer and be specific about your preferences. For example, 'I usually read magazines about current affairs. Additionally, I explore different genres such as autobiographies, biographies, romance, and thrillers.'

範例: In the library, I usually read magazines about current affairs. Additionally, I like to explore different genres, including autobiographies, biographies, romance, and thrillers.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete phrases. Provide specific examples and use linking words. For example, 'Yes, I often visited the library as a child. I enjoyed reading short stories, especially real-life stories like those in the Chicken Soup for the Soul series. I also liked children's books, such as "Famous Five".'

範例: Yes, I often visited the library as a child. I enjoyed reading short stories, especially real-life stories like those in the Chicken Soup for the Soul series. I also liked children's books, such as "Famous Five."

建議: Answer the question directly and clearly. Avoid unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Use linking words to contrast ideas. For example, 'I am not sure about Chinese kids as I have lived in India all my life. However, Indian kids usually do not go to the library often, except in some convent schools and English-medium schools where they do.'

範例: I am not sure about Chinese kids since I have lived in India all my life. However, Indian kids usually do not visit libraries often, except in some convent and English-medium schools where library visits are more common.

× Yes, I do go to library on twice a week, Wednesday and Saturday.

✓ Yes, I do go to the library twice a week, on Wednesday and Saturday.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'on' should be placed before the days, and 'twice a week' does not need 'on'.

× On Wednesday I usually read magazines to get my UH to keep myself updated about the current affairs and also about uh new trends in the market.

✓ On Wednesday, I usually read magazines to keep myself updated about current affairs and new trends in the market.

The phrase 'to get my UH' is unclear and unnecessary; 'to keep myself updated' suffices. Also, 'the current affairs' should be 'current affairs' without 'the' as it is a general concept. Commas improve clarity.

× And during Saturday I tried to borrow books.

✓ And on Saturdays, I try to borrow books.

Since the student is describing habitual actions, present tense 'try' is appropriate. Also, 'during Saturday' is incorrect; 'on Saturdays' is the correct prepositional phrase for habitual actions on days.

× Have I already mentioned I like to read magazines and about current affairs?

✓ Have I already mentioned that I like to read magazines and learn about current affairs?

The sentence lacks 'that' to connect clauses properly. Also, 'and about current affairs' is incomplete; adding 'learn about' clarifies the meaning.

× Also sometimes I do look into different genre.

✓ Also, sometimes I do look into different genres.

The plural form 'genres' is needed because 'different' implies more than one. A comma after 'Also' improves readability.

× I try new genres like autobiography, biographies, sometimes romance and sometimes a thriller.

✓ I try new genres like autobiography, biography, sometimes romance, and sometimes thriller.

The list mixes singular and plural forms inconsistently. 'Autobiography' and 'biography' should both be singular or plural consistently. Also, articles before 'thriller' should be consistent; removing 'a' makes it parallel.

× Yes, I often visited library as a kid.

✓ Yes, I often visited the library as a kid.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× I liked books with short stories, umm, mostly real life stories, for example chicken soup stories.

✓ I liked books with short stories, mostly real-life stories, for example, Chicken Soup stories.

'Real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as an adjective. Also, 'Chicken Soup stories' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. Commas improve clarity.

× I also enjoyed reading, uh, books related to uh, children, like Famous.

✓ I also enjoyed reading books related to children, like Famous.

The commas and filler words 'uh' are unnecessary. The phrase 'books related to children' is correct without extra commas.

× I am not sure of Chinese kids has I have spent my entire life in India, but I can speak about Indian kids.

✓ I am not sure about Chinese kids as I have spent my entire life in India, but I can speak about Indian kids.

'Not sure of Chinese kids has' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'not sure about Chinese kids as'. This corrects the pronoun and conjunction usage.

× Uh, Indian kids currently do not go to library usually, but uh, in some schools hasn't a convent and uh schools where English language is first, Yeah they do.

✓ Indian kids currently do not usually go to the library, but in some schools that have a convent and schools where English is the first language, they do.

'Go to library' needs 'the' before 'library'. 'Hasn't a convent' is incorrect; it should be 'that have a convent'. 'English language is first' should be 'English is the first language'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.