图书馆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using proper articles and plural forms. Also, avoid redundancy and organize your answer with clear linking words. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: I seldom go to the library because I am a working woman and have little free time. However, I visit it when I need to borrow or return books.

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear phrases like 'fix with'. Also, be specific about your activities in the library and keep sentences concise.

範例: Whenever I go to the library, I look for my favourite books and spend some time reading their introductions to decide which ones to borrow. I also enjoy reading magazines there.

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use past tense correctly and organize your answer logically with linking words. Be specific about your experience and avoid repetition.

範例: I don't remember going to a library during my childhood because my school didn't have one. I first visited a library in my city when I was about ten years old.

建議: Avoid vague statements and unsupported assumptions. Try to give a clear opinion or say you are unsure. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid irrelevant details like cartoons unless directly related.

範例: I'm not sure, but I think many Chinese kids visit libraries because they enjoy reading various books. Libraries are popular places for children to learn and explore.

× I seldom go to library because these days I am working women, so I have a less time to go library, visit them when I want to borrow any book and I go when I need to return the book.

✓ I seldom go to the library because these days I am a working woman, so I have less time to go to the library, visit it when I want to borrow any book and I go when I need to return the book.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'a' is needed before 'working woman' to indicate singular countable noun. 'Less time' is correct without 'a' because 'time' is uncountable here. 'Go to library' needs 'to' as a preposition before 'library'. 'Visit them' is incorrect because 'library' is singular; it should be 'visit it'.

× Whenever I go to library, I find some my favorite books and also try to spend some time to read the books in the front page so I can fix with.

✓ Whenever I go to the library, I find some of my favorite books and also try to spend some time reading the books on the front page so I can decide.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' as it refers to a specific place. 'Some my favorite books' is incorrect; it should be 'some of my favorite books' to show possession. 'Spend some time to read' should be 'spend some time reading' because 'spend time' is followed by a gerund. 'In the front page' should be 'on the front page' because 'on' is the correct preposition for pages. 'Fix with' is unclear; 'decide' is a better verb here.

× I can fix my choice which one is the good because and I can read some magazines.

✓ I can decide which one is good because I can read some magazines.

'Fix my choice' is not idiomatic; 'decide' is better. 'Which one is the good' should be 'which one is good' without 'the' before 'good' because 'good' is an adjective here. The sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.

× I didn't remember I went to library during my childhood time because that time I mostly went to school and there was no library and after the 10 when I was 10 year that time I visit first time in library in my city.

✓ I don't remember going to the library during my childhood because at that time I mostly went to school and there was no library. When I was 10 years old, I visited the library for the first time in my city.

'Didn't remember' is incorrect; 'don't remember' is used for present lack of memory. 'Went to library' needs 'the' before 'library'. 'After the 10 when I was 10 year' is ungrammatical; it should be 'When I was 10 years old'. 'I visit first time' should be 'I visited for the first time' to use past tense and correct word order. 'Year' should be plural 'years'.

× I have no idea about this but I see many movies and read about the Chinese papers, like to read the books.

✓ I have no idea about this but I see many movies and read Chinese papers, and like to read books.

'The Chinese papers' is incorrect; 'Chinese papers' without 'the' is better when speaking generally. 'The books' is unnecessary here; 'books' without 'the' is more natural when speaking generally.

× So obviously they visit the library and then read many type of books, comments and I watched some cartoons related to this.

✓ So obviously they visit the library and then read many types of books and comments, and I have watched some cartoons related to this.

'Many type of books' is incorrect; it should be 'many types of books' because 'types' is plural. 'I watched' should be 'I have watched' to connect past experience to present. Also, commas and conjunctions were adjusted for clarity.