列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar, for example, say "I'm a very organized person" and "it helps me write down the things I need." Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

範例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because I'm a very organized person. It helps me remember exactly what I need, making my shopping trips more efficient and less stressful.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "Ionem" and "make lease." Try to proofread your answer and use correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, "because" or "so."

範例: Yes, I always make lists for my work because I am very organized. By doing this, I can prioritize tasks and complete them before the deadlines, which helps me save time.

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and finish your sentences clearly. Use linking words like "because" to explain reasons, and provide more specific details to support your points.

範例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous and do things whenever they feel like it. Also, some believe that making lists can cause anxiety by reminding them of too many tasks.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but contains a confusing phrase "I can't change the list anytime." It would be better to say "I can change the list anytime." Also, try to use linking words like "because" to connect your reasons clearly.

範例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is more accessible and convenient. I can easily add or remove items anytime, and it's easier to carry my phone than paper wherever I go.

× I'm very organised person, it helps me to write the things I need and it is easier and more sufficient for me when I go for shopping.

✓ I'm a very organised person; it helps me to write down the things I need, and it is easier and more efficient for me when I go shopping.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very organised person'. Also, 'more sufficient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'efficient'. Additionally, 'go for shopping' should be 'go shopping'. Using a semicolon or separating into two sentences improves clarity.

× Ionem a very organized person and by making lists for my work it helped me to organize the things I need to complete before a certain period of time.

✓ I am a very organized person, and by making lists for my work, it helps me to organize the things I need to complete before a certain period of time.

The original sentence has a typo 'Ionem' instead of 'I am'. Also, the tense is inconsistent; 'helped' should be 'helps' to match the present context. Commas are added for clarity.

× So I make lease for my work and I finish it before the time and save time.

✓ So I make lists for my work, and I finish them before the time and save time.

The word 'lease' is a typo and should be 'lists' to match the context. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'lists'.

× Some people are spontaneous, they like to do things in a random time.

✓ Some people are spontaneous; they like to do things at random times.

The original sentence is a comma splice; it should be separated by a semicolon or period. Also, 'in a random time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'at random times'.

× So people don't like to make a list.

✓ Therefore, some people don't like to make a list.

Starting a sentence with 'So' is informal; 'Therefore' is more appropriate here to show cause and effect.

× And I for example, some people don't make a list because they think it it will make them anxious and it will make them.

✓ For example, some people don't make a list because they think it will make them anxious.

The sentence is fragmented and contains repetition ('it it will make them'). Removing 'And I' and the repeated phrase improves clarity and correctness.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more accessible and I can't change the list anytime and it is easier for me to carry a phone than carry a paper wherever I go.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more accessible, I can change the list anytime, and it is easier for me to carry a phone than to carry paper wherever I go.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'can't' which contradicts the intended meaning. It should be 'can' to express ability. Also, commas and 'to' before 'carry paper' improve sentence flow and parallelism.