列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, instead of repeating 'to' and 'what', say: "I make a short list on my phone because it helps me remember what to buy and saves time in the store."

範例: Yes, I make a short list on my phone because it helps me remember what to buy and saves time in the store.

建議: Clarify your answer to directly address the question about work lists. Avoid confusing phrases like 'list for my birthday' and repeated words. Use linking words to explain how the list helps your productivity and punctuality.

範例: Yes, I make lists for my work tasks because they help me stay organized and complete my work on time. For example, I track my progress and prioritize tasks to improve my productivity.

建議: Avoid vague expressions like 'enormous people' and repeated phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why some people dislike making lists.

範例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it boring and time-consuming. Moreover, they believe they can remember everything while shopping, so they only make lists for important items.

建議: Correct mistakes such as 'on the people' to 'on paper' and avoid repeated words. Use linking words to compare past and present preferences clearly and keep your answer concise.

範例: When I was a teenager, I made lists on paper because it was convenient. However, now I prefer making lists on my phone since it's handy and allows me to easily add important items while shopping.

× It helps me to to remind what what I have to shop in the in the store and no need to waste time for looking and remembering the things.

✓ It helps me to remember what I have to shop for in the store and there is no need to waste time looking and remembering the things.

The phrase 'helps me to to remind' is incorrect because 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb or 'to' plus base verb, not 'to remind' in this context. Also, 'remind' is not appropriate here; 'remember' fits better. The phrase 'for looking' should be 'looking' without 'for' because 'waste time' is followed by a gerund without a preposition. Repetition of 'what' and 'in the' are errors and should be removed for clarity.

× Yes, I make a list for my birthday that helps me to track my productivity during my work arts.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my birthday that helps me track my productivity during my work hours.

The phrase 'helps me to track' is acceptable, but 'helps me track' is more natural. The phrase 'work arts' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'work hours' is the correct term. No 'to' is needed after 'helps me' when followed by a verb.

× Apart from this, I would love to do work on time, so making a list is really efficient to to work on time.

✓ Apart from this, I would love to do work on time, so making a list is really efficient for working on time.

The phrase 'efficient to to work' is incorrect; 'efficient for working' is the correct form because 'efficient' is followed by 'for' plus gerund to indicate purpose. The repeated 'to' is a typographical error.

× They are the enormous people who don't like to make a list because they find it boring and time consuming.

✓ There are many people who don't like to make a list because they find it boring and time-consuming.

'The enormous people' is incorrect; 'enormous' is an adjective meaning very large in size, not suitable here. The correct quantifier is 'many' to indicate a large number of people. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective.

× They think and they think they can remember everything when they are doing a shopping.

✓ They think they can remember everything when they are shopping.

The phrase 'doing a shopping' is incorrect; 'shopping' is an uncountable noun and does not require 'a'. The verb 'doing' is unnecessary here. Also, the repeated 'they think' is redundant and should be simplified.

× So usually they prefer to make a list only for the important stuff, not for all the things.

✓ So usually they prefer to make a list only for the important stuff, not for everything.

'All the things' is awkward; 'everything' is more natural and correct in this context. 'Stuff' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× When I was teenager I made a list on the people and found it very convenient.

✓ When I was a teenager, I made a list on paper and found it very convenient.

'When I was teenager' is missing the article 'a' before 'teenager'. 'On the people' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'on paper'. Also, a comma after the introductory clause improves readability.

× But now I would love to make a list on the phone because it's very handy to handy to write down the stuff that is very important when you are shopping and so I had I make a huge list on my phone.

✓ But now I would love to make a list on my phone because it's very handy to write down the stuff that is very important when you are shopping, so I make a huge list on my phone.

The phrase 'make a list on the phone' should be 'on my phone' to indicate possession. The repeated phrase 'handy to handy to' is a typographical error and should be corrected to 'handy to'. The phrase 'I had I make' is incorrect; it should be 'I make'. Also, a comma before 'so' improves sentence flow.