列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장이 다소 길고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 'I really liked spontaneous activities'는 시제 오류가 있으니 현재형으로 수정하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 주제 문장과 이유를 명확히 구분하여 답변을 구조화하세요.

範例: No, I usually don't make a shopping list because I prefer spontaneous activities. Also, I'm not good at planning, so I enjoy impulsive shopping.

建議: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 있으나, 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 있습니다. 'it's helps'는 'it helps'로 수정하고, 'my the most important thing'은 'the most important tasks'로 고치는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

範例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me work more efficiently. For example, I can manage my time better and prioritize the most important tasks, so it works well for me.

建議: 답변이 명확하고 논리적이지만, 'time consuming'은 'time-consuming'으로 하이픈을 붙여야 하며, 문장 사이에 연결어를 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 예를 들어, 'Moreover'나 'In addition' 같은 표현을 사용해 보세요.

範例: I think some people don't like making lists because it can feel time-consuming even before they start important tasks. Moreover, some might find it boring or prefer to work spontaneously without planning everything in advance.

建議: 답변에 어색한 표현과 오타가 있습니다. 'everyday every time'은 중복 표현이므로 'every day'로 수정하고, 'paperless'는 'paper list' 또는 'paper notebook'으로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 하고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 개선하세요.

範例: I definitely prefer to make lists on my phone because I always carry it with me every day. In contrast, I sometimes forget to bring my paper list, which can negatively affect my schedule and planning.

× When you shop, No, I don't make any list for my shopping usually because I'm not good at making some plans at all and also I really liked spontaneous activities so that's why I enjoy just impulsive shopping.

✓ No, I don't usually make any list for my shopping because I'm not good at making plans at all and I really like spontaneous activities, so that's why I enjoy just impulsive shopping.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'When you shop' at the beginning which is unnecessary and confusing. Also, 'liked' should be 'like' to match the present tense context. 'Some plans' is better as 'plans' without 'some'. The pronoun 'I' should be consistent and the sentence structure should be clearer for better understanding.

× For your work, yes, I do make a list for my work usually because it's helps me work more efficiently.

✓ For my work, yes, I usually make a list because it helps me work more efficiently.

The phrase 'it's helps' is incorrect; 'it helps' is correct because 'helps' already includes the third person singular verb form. Also, 'I do make a list for my work usually' is better as 'I usually make a list for my work' for natural word order.

× Like for example, I can manage my time and I can prioritize my the most important thing that I have to do and it does work for me.

✓ For example, I can manage my time and prioritize the most important things I have to do, and it works for me.

The phrase 'my the most important thing' is incorrect; 'the most important things' is appropriate here. Also, 'does work' can be simplified to 'works' for natural expression. 'Like for example' is redundant; 'For example' suffices.

× I think some people don't like making lists because it can feel time consuming even before they start their important task.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because it can feel time-consuming even before they start their important tasks.

'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match 'some people' and generalize the statement.

× Also some might find it boring or prefer to work spontaneously without planning everything in advance.

✓ Also, some might find it boring or prefer to work spontaneously without planning everything in advance.

A comma is needed after 'Also' for correct punctuation. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× I definitely prefer to make a list on my phone because I always carry it with me everyday every time.

✓ I definitely prefer to make a list on my phone because I always carry it with me every day, every time.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct phrase here is 'every day' meaning 'each day'. Also, a comma is needed between 'every day' and 'every time' for clarity.

× But unlike my phone, I sometimes forget to bring my paperless and it can negatively affect my schedule, my planning.

✓ But unlike my phone, I sometimes forget to bring my paper list, and it can negatively affect my schedule and planning.

'Paperless' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'paper list' or 'paper notebook'. Also, 'my schedule, my planning' is better expressed as 'my schedule and planning' for natural coordination.