列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying "A person who have forgetful mind like me," say "As a forgetful person, I make a list every time I go shopping." Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: As a forgetful person, I always make a shopping list on my mobile phone. This helps me remember what I need to buy and shop efficiently.

建議: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say "I am a precise person who likes to complete tasks on the same day. Therefore, I make a list the night before to organize my work, and this method helps me finish my tasks efficiently."

範例: I am a precise person who likes to complete tasks on the same day. Therefore, I make a list the night before to organize my work, and this method helps me finish my tasks efficiently.

建議: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words. For example, say "In my opinion, some people believe they are organized enough to manage their work without lists. Therefore, they feel they don't need this method to work precisely."

範例: In my opinion, some people believe they are organized enough to manage their work without lists. Therefore, they feel they don't need this method to work precisely.

建議: Work on sentence clarity and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say "I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because I am forgetful. Even if I write a list on paper, I might lose it, but my phone is always with me."

範例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because I am forgetful. Even if I write a list on paper, I might lose it, but my phone is always with me.

× A person who have forgetful mind like me makes a list every time when I go to shopping.

✓ A person who has a forgetful mind like me makes a list every time when I go shopping.

The subject 'person' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to agree in number. Also, 'go to shopping' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go shopping' without 'to'.

× I go to shopping so that I'm aware about the things that I'm going to buy.

✓ I go shopping so that I'm aware of the things that I'm going to buy.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. Also, the correct preposition after 'aware' is 'of', not 'about'.

× I'm like a precise person who like to do every task on the day that I want to.

✓ I'm like a precise person who likes to do every task on the day that I want to.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'person' which is singular, so the verb should be 'likes' instead of 'like' to agree in number.

× So I make a list before night that I have to come finish these works on the next day at work.

✓ So I make a list before night that I have to finish these tasks the next day at work.

The phrase 'come finish' is incorrect; it should be simply 'finish'. Also, 'works' is not commonly used in this context; 'tasks' is more appropriate. 'On the next day' should be 'the next day' without 'on'.

× So I make my regular schedule and it works really perfectly to complete my.

✓ So I make my regular schedule and it works really well to help me complete my tasks.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'complete my' which is incomplete. Adding 'tasks' completes the thought. Also, 'works really perfectly' is awkward; 'works really well' is more natural.

× According to me, some people, they think that they're really very organized at doing their work without having a prepared list.

✓ According to me, some people think that they're very organized in doing their work without having a prepared list.

The phrase 'some people, they think' is redundant; either 'some people think' or 'they think' should be used. Also, 'really very' is redundant; 'very' alone suffices. 'At doing' should be 'in doing'.

× So and they think that they can manage their time really very properly.

✓ And they think that they can manage their time very properly.

Starting a sentence with 'So and' is incorrect; 'And' alone is sufficient. Also, 'really very' is redundant; 'very' alone is enough.

× They don't need such a method to do their work in a precise way.

✓ They don't need such a method to do their work precisely.

While 'in a precise way' is not incorrect, using the adverb 'precisely' is more concise and natural in this context.

× I would like to make I'd like to make list on my mobile phone because I am really forgetful person.

✓ I would like to make a list on my mobile phone because I am a really forgetful person.

The noun 'list' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Also, 'forgetful person' needs the article 'a' before it.

× So even if I make a list on paper, I'm sure that I'm gonna forget that at any place.

✓ So even if I make a list on paper, I'm sure that I'm going to forget it somewhere.

The phrase 'gonna' is informal; 'going to' is preferred in formal speech. 'Forget that at any place' is awkward; 'forget it somewhere' is more natural.

× And if I go for shopping or buying any of the groceries, I'm sure I'm gonna forget that.

✓ And if I go shopping or buy any groceries, I'm sure I'm going to forget them.

The phrase 'go for shopping or buying' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping or buy'. Also, 'gonna' should be 'going to'. 'Forget that' should be 'forget them' referring to groceries.