列表— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ не является естественным и содержит грамматические ошибки, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется использовать простые и чёткие предложения, отвечая прямо на вопрос, избегая лишних слов и ошибок.

範例: Yes, sometimes I make a shopping list to help me remember what I need to buy at the market. It helps me avoid buying unnecessary things.

建議: Ответ не ясен и содержит много ошибок. Следует отвечать прямо, используя связные предложения и объясняя причину, почему не используете списки на работе.

範例: No, I don't usually make lists for my work because I prefer to follow my enthusiasm. This method helps me stay motivated and productive.

建議: Ответ очень непонятен и неструктурирован. Рекомендуется использовать простые предложения, объясняя причины, почему люди не любят составлять списки, с использованием связующих слов.

範例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel it limits their freedom or they lack confidence in planning. They prefer to do things spontaneously.

建議: Ответ содержит повторения и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать более точные слова и связные предложения, чтобы ясно выразить предпочтения.

範例: I don't see much difference between making a list on paper or on my phone. However, I prefer using my phone because it's easier to check and update the list anytime.

× Sometimes I do English when I'm for example my mind doing list for shopping in the market, buying the porches what they really need and that's it.

✓ Sometimes I do English when, for example, I am making a list for shopping in the market, buying the purchases that they really need, and that's it.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'doing list' instead of 'making a list'. The verb 'make' is commonly used with 'list'. Also, 'porches' is a misspelling of 'purchases'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs reordering for clarity.

× No, I didn't do this in my room because it didn't really necessary for me 'cause I can follow to my enthusiasm and it's really helped me.

✓ No, I didn't do this in my room because it wasn't really necessary for me since I can follow my enthusiasm and it really helps me.

The phrase 'didn't really necessary' is incorrect; it should be 'wasn't really necessary' to match past tense with 'didn't'. Also, 'it's really helped me' mixes tenses; 'it really helps me' is correct in present tense to express ongoing effect.

× And so this is the list isn't so improved in my work.

✓ And so this list hasn't really improved my work.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'isn't so improved' which is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'hasn't really improved' to indicate the list's effect on work. Also, 'this is the list' is awkward; 'this list' is better.

× Mere they didn't so confidence in the air and doing and responsibilities and so on.

✓ Maybe they don't have much confidence in themselves and in doing responsibilities and so on.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun use and incorrect words like 'Mere' and 'didn't so confidence'. The correction clarifies the subject and uses appropriate pronouns and verbs.

× That's why they want to do all this to the correctly and they're doing this and what to do, for example, tomorrow days.

✓ That's why they want to do all this correctly and plan what to do, for example, in the coming days.

The phrase 'to the correctly' is incorrect; 'correctly' alone suffices. Also, 'and they're doing this and what to do' is confusing and needs restructuring for clarity.

× I I don't see between the big distinguish because you can write on a list, also on a list and in your phone.

✓ I don't see much difference because you can write a list on paper or on your phone.

The phrase 'see between the big distinguish' is incorrect; 'see much difference' is correct. Also, 'write on a list' is incorrect; one 'writes a list'. Prepositions are corrected accordingly.

× But easier it can be on the phone because you can check it and from your package and so on.

✓ But it's easier on the phone because you can check it and access it from your package and so on.

The adverb 'easier' is misplaced; it should be 'it's easier'. Also, 'check it and from your package' is incomplete; 'access it from your package' clarifies the meaning.